to give......whole

Author: love gone wrong ASL Info:    27/m/colorado Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42 Words: 92

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to give......whole

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to find this treasure sought undying love .... found, not bought sex no longer an issue sharing of souls, I pursue a woman's soft caress intelligent conversation, with out duress warming cold hearts with laughter sharing life, before and after commitment deep and true such as oceans wide and blue this quest I will accept with humbled grace and patience I have found it once before I will find true love once more entering into it tride and true to give myself ... heart, mind and soul to give myself entirely whole

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Sex no longer an issue...? Not quite clear about that reference...but in all other respects, I understand exactly your meaning about love found and the joining of souls...this was nice

| Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]

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