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to give......whole

Author: love gone wrong
ASL Info:    27/m/colorado
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Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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to give......whole

to find this treasure sought
undying love .... found, not bought
sex no longer an issue
sharing of souls, I pursue
a woman's soft caress
intelligent conversation, with out duress
warming cold hearts with laughter
sharing life, before and after
commitment deep and true
such as oceans wide and blue
this quest I will accept
with humbled grace and patience
I have found it once before
I will find true love once more
entering into it tride and true
to give myself ... heart, mind and soul
to give myself entirely

Submitted on 2004-09-28 10:21:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Sex no longer an issue...? Not quite clear about that reference...but in all other respects, I understand exactly your meaning about love found and the joining of souls...this was nice
| Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]

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