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    dots Submission Name: Untitleddots

    Author: drkpoet
    ASL Info:    25/m/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 442/527/94
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Something i wrote for a contest.. im sure u'll heard of it... Laws Of Life.

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    Death conceals our bodies,
    But memories control our minds.
    Fear is spread within us,
    but friends make it fine.

    Wisdom Carries life
    when death carries fear
    understanding brings us knowledge
    of why god pulls us near.

    We try to live the pain
    while we try to succeed
    but death beings us sorrow
    to which our passion relieves

    We try to find the key
    the key to our success
    but all we seem to find
    is others trying their best.

    while wealth becomes abundent
    and riches become your life
    just take these words of wisdom
    for these are the laws of life.


    Submitted on 2004-09-28 16:55:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So many hide behind the curtain of death to avoid looking life in the eyes for sometimes the darkness of death is more comforting than the blinding light of life. In this poem it shows how even though the veil of death may lay upon your soul, you can still push it aside with faith and passion. Thanks for sharing this poem.
    | Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      I cant really tell you why, but I like this poem a lot. I think will will add it to my favorites list, this just really has something to it, and I can not explain. Great Job.
    | Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]

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