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    dots Submission Name: The silly basis of my storydots

    Author: Damien Vladimir
    ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122/89/35
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
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    dotsThe silly basis of my storydots

    For a hell in disguise and a life lead inside a true misery,
    i'm rediscovering,a realm so unparrallel,
    an outer hell of long gone history
    i force a will to hesitate, but can't escape blissfully,
    but manage to be captured in by such blizzardry,
    oh what a mystery!
    A reality of no release,
    i would not of faced this dream intentionally.

    in a second my life got taken away
    as the clouds in the sky is the trace of decay
    a slave to the wave,
    in my mind, inner cave
    my afraid, my dismay
    turns to pain, burns my face
    but my name rests the same
    yet my eyes bleed today,
    oh this day!
    oh this day!
    agiain i am the renerade!

    i run for the gun as it waits to slay,
    a game to the end is a waste of shame
    a labyrinth gaze,
    my answer explained
    the phantom's amazing escape was in place,in play-ing!
    while slaying the crave for the flesh,destroy-ing,
    the warrior's worry!
    the old woman's story,
    displaying the flames of da---mi---en,
    the end of my fairy, my scary,my life gone story.
    As told by the only, the mystic old woman of story orgies.
    in killing myself,i'm in hell tortured
    repentful i am, and so full of remorse,
    though there is not one way to return,
    to the life worth curse, of distorted new mornings.

    Submitted on 2004-09-29 03:07:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The old woman that tells the story, as though she was me.to give the listeners a glimpse of hearing thoughts as told by an actual victim...[sorry i cut this in two pieces].-vlad
    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]
      MY suicidal dream as told by a suicide preventor[counselor].either way, it's just me in pain and babbling bullsh*t.ha!-Damien Vladimir09
    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]

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