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    dots Submission Name: the game.dots
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    Author: nameless_nobody
    ASL Info:    18 in a few days.
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 333/421/67
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1453
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 171



    Description:
       is it short and sweet or does it need more detail? its just a quick jotting i did during my dinner. what type of peom do you think it fits best?


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    dotsthe game.dots
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    Deal the cards,
    Play your hand,
    Bluff the game,
    As best you can,
    Roll the dice,
    Place your bets,
    Game of life,
    No regrets.




    Submitted on 2004-09-29 10:02:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked the way that had a rythem, it sounded like you were actually in the middle of a card game and were telling us what was going through your mind as you were playing.
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by lost and alone | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it 2! Fast & direct yet understandable! I don't know what else to say to such a short poem but it was nice really! Hope to read more from u peace!
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      wow to tie gambling and life together like this is relevant to many an individual, life's a crap shoot, very nicely done, and I like the last line, however you decide to roll the dice in life, don't have any regrets...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and sweet. Not really sure what category it falls into, you would have to say since we aren't sure what intent you had in writing it.
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Cassius | [ Reply to This ]


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