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    dots Submission Name: the devourer of soulsdots
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    Author: crazyphreshone
    ASL Info:    31/M/NewYork
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 66/69/30
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    i dont believe this piece needs an explanation











































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































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    dotsthe devourer of soulsdots
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    How many more will suffer,
    through my hands.
    Not that any breathe life
    into these broken lungs,
    except one.
    The only soul i can see,
    whose worth life.
    Charismatic,face of an angel.
    Soul of a fighter,that once
    blinded eyes,day or night.
    Only a demonic clown
    like myself
    could extinguish
    such a bejeweled spirit.
    This blackened heart of coal,
    pigishly devouring
    then digesting souls;
    carved from solid gold.
    Icewater blood flowing through veins.
    Pumping a heart so cold,
    problematic brain you could call insane...




    Submitted on 2004-09-29 13:02:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree with beadsmen. you used way too many cliché`s or hoever you spell it. but even though you did use clichés it still sounds very good. just try to be a little more original next time.
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by darkness child | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...I respect the way this poem reflects on two different types of emotions-the angel, light, and then the "blackened heart of coal," dark. Very nice, the thoughts of mercilessness are great and stand perfectly by the title.
    -Vampy
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Tears of Azrael | [ Reply to This ]


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