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    dots Submission Name: I'll Be Heredots

    Author: Tears of Azrael
    ASL Info:    14/F/Lost
    Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 107/102/25
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1070
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       I wrote this when I was "in love" and I made it originally lyrics to an angry song, then I felt its passive rhythm and decided to change it to something more, eh, "lovey." The rhyming scheme does not make sense...the syntax of the poem does not make sense...and I know that I should stop using "I" in my poetry, and I have many poems in a third person's point of view, but this poem is talking about me, hence the "I"...but overall, I didn't think it too bad...

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    dotsI'll Be Heredots

    You're lost, you're weak
    And all that you'll ever seek
    Is me
    And I'll be here
    You're the reason I exist
    And, no, I won't let you desist
    I won't risk the chance
    Of losing you again
    Hold your head up high, walk tall
    And remember I'll be here
    To catch you when you fall
    When you think you've gone wrong
    I'll be here
    And I'll hold you strong
    When you hide in shadows, darkness consumed
    I'll be the one to never have assumed
    That you're a failure
    And, no, I won't have it all
    Taken from me
    I'll ignore their shouts of anger
    Because I know
    You're not fake
    Even when you don't need it
    I'll give you strength
    I'll be by your side
    Always at a close length
    And when you start to hate yourself
    Or even hate
    I'll be here
    Even if I'll have to wait
    When you have nothing to say
    I'll take your hand
    And teach you to pray
    Even when you're blinded by tears
    Even when you've lost faith in yourself
    I'll be here

    Submitted on 2004-09-29 18:18:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww, this is so sweet. and beautifully romantic. i would love to hear how the song sounds, too. in fact, i think your 'angrier' melody could easily turn this into a wonderfully inronic song. kind of like a 3rd wheel thing or something like that. anyway, i would absolutely melt if my guy wrote something like this for me. whoever you wrote it for must be very special.
    | Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by jinx | [ Reply to This ]
      ill i can say is beutifull! i loved this and seriusly it made me think of soeme people i know ... whoever you are there for is certainly very ver lucky .
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Wolfdawn | [ Reply to This ]
      Really good, I wish I could write like that and you are so much younger than me. Do you have music for this, or just the lyrics?
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Cassius | [ Reply to This ]
      DAMN, that is strong. Efectionate...BEAUTIFUL! I loved it, you are very talented. Keep believing. I love your work, GREAT JOB. Your feelings are expressed well!
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Brooke | [ Reply to This ]

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