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    dots Submission Name: Sorry-Paindots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       I am so sorry Adam, I never meant to hurt you. I cant let that happen though. I love you...but I cant I am so sorry.


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    I am so sorry
    My heart cries
    Because of the pain I caused

    My head filled with memories
    That we can never share again
    Because of the pain I caused

    I am dead
    Now that I cant be with you
    Because of the pain I caused

    Everything I am
    Is now gone
    Because of the pain I caused




    Submitted on 2004-09-29 20:57:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i need to talk to you.. as soon as i can.. you have caused me no pain at all and i want all the world to know that.. i love you and i never want to lose you.. being with you is all i have ever wanted and all i will ever need.. please don't throw that away.. i need you so that i can have reason.. the only pain that could ever come to me is not being with you.. i can't live this life alone again.. being with you is the only thing worth anything in this world to me.. please see that my love.. don't throw it away when neither of us wishes for this.. i can't stand the thought of not being with you.. i love you so much.. don't leave me alone again.. please..
    | Posted on 2004-10-01 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      Good job. Makes unwanted memories come to mind. You speak of everything that you are is gone now. Sounds like you messed up pretty bad.
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Marbles | [ Reply to This ]
      OoooOooooOOOO...the narrator (is it you??) sounds like a sinner...one who hurt her/his loved one... and the part where you describe the person being dead...for some reason, I thought that the narrator wasn't dead physically, but inside, in her heart, in her soul...but that's just me and my dark mind ...great work.
    -Vampy
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Tears of Azrael | [ Reply to This ]
      This completely makes me feel as if I were in your shoes. It's really great. And I love what you have written. My favorite part of it all "was I am dead
    Now that I cant be with you
    Because of the pain I caused "
    Keep writing, you're great.
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by gothicsweetness | [ Reply to This ]
      I understand what you're talking about. . . there was a guy that I was really good friends with (I wished it was more) and then I did something outrageously stupid and. . . yeah. But we're friends again now so keep your head up. . . things are bound to get better, even if not the way you want them to.
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]


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