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    dots Submission Name: In a Point of Viewdots

    Author: Tears of Azrael
    ASL Info:    14/F/Lost
    Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 107/102/25
    Words: 300
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This was written on the beach....yes, every once in a while I am forced to be exposed to the sun.....and I was so tired of all the happiness and while I gazed out at the sea, it seemed to me that time stopped....and the death-related question came to me again: "What does it feel like to be dead?" So I decided to use different point of views...it turned out longer than I expected....
    Also, most of my poetry is formatted in questions....this is an example of it

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    dotsIn a Point of Viewdots

    Hailed in the night, forgotten by day
    A fear never redeemed
    In the last illusions of the twilight
    Of a hope left undreamed

    A hand afraid to give
    A life afraid to live

    A place where grass does not grow
    Destroyed and withered by the rain
    Where the skies are domes of undying gray
    In a place like this, is there only pain?

    The mind is thoughts in capture
    A sweet, daemonic rapture

    Is the hunter the one hunted?
    Or just a thought of imagination?
    Is the life we live real?
    Or just another fold of a permanent imagination?

    The gray day, a day of pain, a day of bothers
    May mean death to some, but life to others

    Carried in the waves of hate
    Are the glazed eyes of shame
    Cowardice and surrendering to a piece of present
    Makes disgrace a name

    Are we dead in the night, reliving in the morrow?
    In every laugh, is there a stream of sorrow?

    What are the thoughts
    Of a child in a womb?
    Is it the feeling of a miracle?
    Or the darkness of a tomb?

    Is there such thing as good and evil, light and dark?
    As death claims us, will people remember our mark?

    Is there proof of the life that engulfs us?
    Repose of an eternal slumber
    Only a memory in the wind's breath
    Would it rip us asunder?

    Can there be hope seen through empty eyes?
    Hope...an ember that fades and then dies

    How would it be to be dead?
    To forever leave this universe?
    Would it be considered a blessing?
    Or an infernal curse?

    Are there really a past, present, and future too?
    Some may know; it's all in a point of view

    Submitted on 2004-09-29 22:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was great. It kept my attention and made me think. Most poems on here thatare long like that I dont take time to read, But I really got into this one. It flowed well and it sounds great. Good job
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Marbles | [ Reply to This ]

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