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    dots Submission Name: Two Towersdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Dark
    Total Views: 620
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    Description:
       Im still on a break from writing anything new but I felt like posting two older pieces of mine. BAck story on this is its about my father who I nolonger speak to or see. He is a survivor of 9/11/01 and this doesnt really have much to do with that horrible event other then to say what would I think of you know had you died then. In the following years of 9/11 instead of trying to patch his relationship with his children he destroyed it. I promise the other piece I am gonna post is a happy one.


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    I sit here with
    an unsettling thought in mind
    I have reflected over these past 21 years
    I have rejected your ideals

    But what if on that day
    Your life had been lost
    Would you have been deemed
    another martyr of our western ideals
    would I hold you in some god like reverence
    for being one of too many victims

    On that day two towers fell
    For me in a far off land
    Time stopped and I was lost without emotion
    Then there was a phone call, and your voice
    To pull me back into my coexistence with the natural flow of time

    For a while I forgot my childhood
    Anger, my resentment
    Because through childish hope
    I almost believed
    That part of you had died

    I once believed that when
    Those two towers fell
    So did your arrogance, stubbornness,
    And your malice.
    All too quickly I learned
    They only lay dormant for a time

    I know now that
    While your ego cowered in
    The wake of the bodies near extinction
    The guise of a human was able
    To stand above the depression, the self pity,
    Long enough to fool those
    Who would almost have loved you.




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      only two comments i'm surprised...i actually teared reading this...the emotion and disapointment it seemed you felt...the fact that after all this ...your father still came out the same person...and how when you wern't sure if he was ok or not you forgot all the pain he caused...and you were worried...then he called and you realized he was still the same person who had let you down and hurt you...the write itself is just heart ache...the subject of the two towers falling and your personal experience mixed in...the last stanza...eh...the refrence of his ego and bodies near extinction...wow seriously...that line itself really got me...and i love the part where you talk of forgetting all your anger towards him...stating your childish hope...believed that part of him had died...wonderful write...purp
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't believe more people didn't comment on this. I loved it, so powerful. He must have done something really awful for you to feel the way you do, so I'm sorry about that and whatever you had to go through or are still going through.
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good, I think it is one of those pieces that has a lot more meaning to the author than a reader could ever understand.
    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by Cassius | [ Reply to This ]


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