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    dots Submission Name: Runningdots

    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       this is a piece I wrote for my friend(my brother form another mother) Mark after his one year old nephew died from medical complications...I was in Spain at the time and this was the only way I knew how to tell him how sorry I was for him but that I am here.

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    You my friend
    Have been the one
    To hold my trust
    And bring me peace

    And if you fall
    Know Iíll come running
    Arms extended for you to grab
    Iíll always come running
    A brotherís love youíve always had

    For you my friend I vow
    To die if you so ask me
    To cry if the occasion calls
    Because I started running
    The day we said hello

    If you ever want for something
    I will strive to produce
    Anything I can to calm your fears
    Because you my friend are a dear one
    Donít be afraid to show your tears

    And I know if I fall
    youíll come running
    And I know if I fall
    For me your arms you will extend

    Iíve never been afraid to tell you my troubles
    Or that you would let me down
    My respect for you is the highest
    I pray I never let you down

    And so for you my friend I vow
    To answer your heart when it calls
    To come running when your tears fall
    I will always come running
    For my friend I hold so dear

    Cause I started running
    The first time we said hello
    I will always come running
    I just wanted to make sure you know

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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Glassglo that you put a lot of thought and effort into this piece. It shows that you were writing to someone in particular, with his understanding in mind.
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good. its awesome how you can be loyal that way to someone. i just wish that there could be more people like that. but we live in an evil world... and no matter how much evil there is we still gotta shine our light for others to see.
    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by BrokenRose | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great way to support someone. I feel bad for your friend, but I'm glad that he has someone as wonderful as you are to hold on to when times get rough. The piece is good, with a solid writing style and good imagery, but it feels wrong critiquing such a thoughtful piece of poetry. Good write. -Archadya
    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by Darc Archadya | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot. It is a special thing to have a friend like this, and you have captured the feelings really well. I have submitted a piece about my best friend as well yesterday. Good Job!
    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by Cassius | [ Reply to This ]

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