Description: okay, this is off the top of my head. I know it needs a lot of work, so feel free to give me your unbiased opinion. Thanks for all your help.
bent not broken -------------------------------------------
I've done a lot in my life
and experienced more than I should have
I've hurt and I've loved
my anger has controlled me
as has my passion
any semblance of control I have
is only that
I've known betrayal and loss--
I like love better, even when it's not real.
I guess I'm a romantic
which is a terrible thing to be in the real world.
Despite everything though:
the cheating, the lying, the loving, the leaving
bent not broken
I LIKE THIS POEM!!! IT WAS A REFRESHING READ BECAUSE IT WAS SO HONEST. THAT'S WHAT MAKES POETRY GREAT, IT ALLOWS US AS WRITERS AND READERS TO BE TOTALLY HONEST. TO KNOW SOMETHING/SOMEONE IS BAD FOR YOU AND TO CONTINUOUSLY TRY IS SO SILLY BUT SO HUMAN NATURE. EVEN IF WE SIGN UP TO GET OUR HEARTS BROKEN WE FIND AWAY TO FORGIVE OURSELVES AND SIGN UP AGAIN, A FOOLISH DESTINY I GUESS.
ANYWHO, GREAT WRITE. I LOOK FORWARD TO READING MORE!!!
ah. You have no CLUE how much i relate to this. Specially the last few lines. Pitty that there is no room in this growing society today for romanticists. One needs be tough these days to be able to endure all the pain, loss and heart break. Dont ever let someone break you, its the worst thing that could EVER happen. Dont let them win, dont let them have that smug satisfaction...
Perfectly said Im sorry I missed this one when you first published it You spoke of life and the Bitter Lifes course perfectly I like how you wrote this as I like your style of writing I will be looking for more of your writes God Bless Your Friend Ron
HA! So this is the significance behind the screen name huh? This is great! Yeah, life! What a good write! You say this needs a lot of work and again I must say this is great stuff as is! "The cheating, the lying, the loving, the leaving, I remain, bent not broken". That is so awesome! I know exactly how this feels too! You have written this just perfectly and I wouldn't change a thing! Hat's off to you! Take care!
Hmmmm. Thoughts. Good thoughts. Love is what makes anyone whole. As you said in a comment to one of my poems. This is kind of your self biography right? I can relate. I have had my ups and downs. Been hurt more than not. But I still go on looking for it again.
the last line is a winner... it gives hope. i just gotta say i love the part about being a romantic and how its not a very good thing to be...the world is so cynical and hardhearted... i say be a romantic... walk with your head in the clouds... why not...? i like how you have balanced this poem out... youve let anger control and passion... how your not focussed on one side of life but that your kinda going for a more whole, rounded, realistic look that im sure most can identify with... awesome!
the last line is the best, as if there's still hope for a romantic in a cruel untrusting world. i really liked this peice. a little rough, it needs a little smoothing out but it has great potential. -steph
You almost made me cry. This piece is BEAUTIFUL and holds such meaning not only to anyone, but most definitely to you and your love and your life. This is one of the first pieces that I've fallen in love with that is meant more for the author then the reader. Your poem is also so truthful, being a romantic is a challenge more then anythings thanks to society:O( Good luck in this world my friend, you're a good person and you deserve the best. I mean you're a GREAT poet who just wrote such a great piece I can see no correction what-so-ever. --Kayla
A comment for Bentnotbroken from Lostandalone? :) Could become good friends! I think this piece shows that you have lived life and that you still hold on to the brighter side. Very straight but thoughtful statement. Keep going!
i really like this. you do not change and you dont kid youself. you show what youve gone through and how you got through it. is also shows how you are not like the world and you still remain yourself to this day. stay strong. stay bent, not broken.
That's a good thing that you 'remain bent not broken' because I've seen the broken and it's not a pretty sight. Just keep going there's always some one more worth your while than someone who can't be faithful. I really liked and understood your poem. hope you will write another. lost and alone.