It's alive, the awaken heart of mine
So surprised, as I forgive you for your crime
I thought about your picture, since your memory has died
I realize, that the prize of my mistake was so divine
Withholding pain, it flies away into the flame, the Hades center eye
For love emotions lost so long ago revive, and fill me up with pride
Just the dying of my heart, as I would never cry
To acknowledge all the blood, I bled through-out my human eyes
As the nights, soon became consolidation
With the company of moons, I have shown appreciation
By means of my creations,
My demonic hidden self, my ferocious pain and shame
Yet I've lived to see today!
As today all things have changed, for the love you've given me
I cry indeed, for I see the flying colors of you loving me.
| This write was really very lyrical, almost came out like a Linkin Park vibe...I get so fvcking wrapped up in their stuff...like a long sorrowful trance...but i'm crazy too, so that make sense...lol..|
All in all, pretty damm good. You have a unique style that sets you apart from the others. It's refreshing and I quite enjoy it.
|| Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ] || I thought that this was pretty good. It contained a lot of good imagery. I'm sorrty something so terrible is going on within your love life, but I hope that things start looking up. At least you've gotten something out of this pain... a really beautiful poem, and although it may not seem like much it is something.||| Posted on 2004-10-01 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ] || I really like this poem because it makes me think of my last break up and even though this piece is a bit hard to interpret, I think I know what you are talking about. I felt, when last my heart broke, that the relationship had been a mistake, but then I looked at everything that had changed inside of me because of that relationship, and I am glad that it happened, and a part of me will always love him because of what he did for me, and the things he made me realize. Some of the events in that relationship were denomic and although I am ashamed of some of those moments, I am proud that the result turned out so well, as I am much stronger because of it. Thank you for putting my thoughts of him and what had happened between us into perspective. I love this poem and keep up the good work.||| Posted on 2004-10-01 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ] |