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Eaten by the World [Ka-boom!]


Author: Damien Vladimir
ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122 /89 /35
Words: 127
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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Eaten by the World [Ka-boom!]



How could you not see, the brilliance that the human brain has offered?
i've suffered an unjust sentence,
as a teen by means of hunger
acquiring menace traits,plus my consequential plungers
now i make a home of dungeons.

A new hope of my alone
my persona and my bones,
turn to stone
burns my eyes out
blur my tone
learned to hide out
loud to shout out
finding shadows of my past doubts
courage lost when laughs were found,
to be a sudden spellbound, with no sound

The courage of my missing
for my instruction,i've commisioned
silver eyes of silver wishes as they glisten
plus i listen with inspection as to nuke the unsuspecting,
flesh decaying world of fornication with a tiny Atom-missile;
Ka-boom!




Submitted on 2004-10-01 15:15:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The whole thing went competely pass me. I'm very confused. hold on let me read it again. ok. well I'm still confused. either it all doesn't have anything to do with each other, or im just a retard. i like the rhyming or w/e, but i'm focusing too much on that. you could tone it down a bit.
| Posted on 2004-10-01 00:00:00 | by roxygirl239 | [ Reply to This ]


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