My morning porridge is a crowd of faces:
David Bowie is beside my cousin Rob;
William Shatner and Aunt Prudence
look like fiery lovers.
Liz Taylor is wrapped in a python:
I eat a bit of Dan Rathera
and he turns into a duck riding a mule.
The maple syrup looks like the Chrysler building.
Frightened by my eyes.
Scared of my mind.
I vow to get some rest
wondering if the tequila from the night before
was made from the wrong sort of cactus.
haha! i vow to get some rest... i love it... the things i think or think i see when im dead tired doesnt sound too far off this early morning breafast insanity! haha! this is very well done though theres a coupla names in there that i dont know... maybe im not sposed to! LOL!
You have tapped into my loathing of the pop culture, and I don't plan on rewarding for it. I loathe this poem for the tip of its hat. What a ridiculous tip, serenading over-valued ghosts, lucky paragons no better than everyday schlubs.
This is very hallucinagenic, though. Though mainly in the sense that it could only make sense to someone on them. Which I have been. Far in the past anyway.
I can definately see Rather being a quacking fool riding on the back of an ass. Perhaps he likes peyote, that wrong kind of prickly f ucker. This is a likable write. You play well with some well-known images.
that's funny. I like how you brought in the celebreties (sp?). and the lines "The maple syrup looks like the Chrysler building Frightened by my eyes Scared of my mind" are great. makes me think the marple syrup is some kind of living being who is afraid of you cause it knows what's on your mind - that you want to eat it.
I think this is good, kinda reminds me of how when I was a kid, I use to look into the clouds and see what I could imagine, or look at my soggy frosted flakes, and see what cool and what my sisters thought was so stupid. I think this was overall a good poem. You did well with your expression. Very comedic, but very rememberic. Great job
Very funny! Great idea. All the 'people' in your oatmeal. Eating Dan Rather, haha, that part was great. The end tied it together because at first I thought, why is she talking about all these people? Great job, this made me laugh. :) -blt
I kinda like this one too I'm kidding, I really like it. I tend to like the more abstract pieces though, so I'm biased. I love the tone of the piece. The title didn't do much for me initially, but after reading the piece, it sticks My dad once told me oatmeal sticks to the ribs. I don't think that is physiologically sound, lol. Anyway, very nice write!