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    dots Submission Name: A New Daydots

    Author: colopoao
    ASL Info:    42/ Male / Hallowell Mai
    Elite Ratio:    4.89 - 62/55/18
    Words: 9
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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       I am still having fun writing haiku's. I am trying to capture emotion and paint a picture with words using this restrictive art form.

    It is easy to get the right number of syllables, it is a challenge to capture what I am thinking inside in such a small poetic form.

    I hope you like this latest creation.....Chris

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    dotsA New Daydots

    A flower opens
    Purple Mountain..Sunlight Beams
    Rain glistens again

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      This says a lot to me, I know traditional haikus are about nature though I tend to steer clear of this tradition. But as well as being about nature, this for me symbolises a new start with the line 'a flower opens' and then 'purple mountains' gives me a sense of fantasy and gives reality and uncertain look. Nice. 'Rain glistens again' says to me that something that lost something has now got it back. Those were my first impressions. Yes, haikus are fun to write, and you did a good job with this.
    | Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      "I am still having fun writing haiku's. I am trying to capture emotion and paint a picture with words using this restrictive art form. " <-Yes! you did this very well!... The piture that you paint with this is so vividly beautiful, especially for only using three lines to paint it... Wonderful... i'mma have to keep this comment short but that deosn't mean i thought any less of this great piece... It's nearly 1 am here and i gotta sleep... Adios! Travis
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
      The way you articulated this piece makes me wanna go to that place and chill. I dig the way you used color and weather. It seems like this piece could be on Earth or another realm.. Nice..
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by Sunray | [ Reply to This ]

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