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Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
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I was cleaning my room the other day and I found this. I wrote it several years ago. It's really short, but I didn't want to say much. That was all I wanted to say, so I left it at that.


When you see
the bottom of the bottle,
are you thinking
of us then?

Submitted on 2004-10-02 13:25:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Merry Meet again Eyes. I am gonna take a risk and say your Dad is an alcoholic. My Dad is too. I felt that way so many times growing up. I am fortunate that my Father is finally in recovery and I hope yours is too. Thank you for putting into words what I wanted to ask my Dad so many times as a child and teen. It's good to know I wasn't the only one. Blessed Be Andrea
| Posted on 2004-11-12 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
  it may be short but it speaks volumes to someone who knows what you are going through. i commented on Daddy [2] before seeing this so i gather you know my dad is an alcoholic. i used to wonder the same things. when you run out of stuff to drink, is that when you remember that you have 2 daughters, 3 ex step children, and 2 ex wives? one day i figure on acctually asking him but until then i've atleast learned how to ask the question. thanks. PS

btw. i'd like your opinion on "Minus One and Answers" i wrote them about my dad. your thoughts would be much appreciated. thanks.
| Posted on 2004-11-28 00:00:00 | by Printer Shock | [ Reply to This ]
  Ooh, this is very good. I like the minimalism, and it is exceptional for an 11 or 12 year old. There's nothing to criticize here, so I'll just say "good job."
| Posted on 2004-10-03 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  for an 11 or 12 year old (you said you wrote it several years ago) to write something like this, is pretty good.
I like it.
It's short and powerful, it has a pow! to it.
and the way it's phrased, I can tell that alot of emotion was released when you wrote it. I can tell you put alot of raw feeling into it. true feeling, candid feeling.
| Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]
  well, since you wrote it a few years back, i have to say that its very makes me wonder actually, and how its just so short its like an abrupt stop that makes me wonder...i like it a lot...
| Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by Catie O Daniels | [ Reply to This ]

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