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    dots Submission Name: Nostalgiadots
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    Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
    ASL Info:    18/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 122/151/29
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1089
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 767



    Description:
       Uuhh yeah, another poem about the people that I live for. It was a fun time in my life, but also a very frightening one too because I became really dependent emotionally on my friends. I don't regret it because some awesome memories were made, but I think that now I've gotten my feelings out about it, I'm ready to move on...maybe


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    dotsNostalgiadots
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    You're still here, but I've lost you forever.
    And every time I see you,
    A chain of images flicker through my mind,
    Little dancing lights that betray my sanity.

    A tampon-banana still-life
    Black compact make-up strewn across the table
    A shivering mass standing in front of the theater
    Dairy soaring through the air
    Loogies launched off the tip of a pen
    A sloppy lipstick message on a hotel mirror
    A whipcream "HI!" plastered to a wall
    And 3 figures huddled in embrace at the entrance to Union Station.

    And with each image that
    Passes through my mind,
    My heart is branded:
    Prisoner to a handful of inspirational fortune cookies.




    Submitted on 2004-10-02 13:51:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was absolutely beautiful, i could see it all in my mind and it was heartbreaking and sweet and just amazing! oh yes, and just a warning, gothicsweetness has been putting that comment on everybody's poems, what a jerk eh? a poem like this deserves a real comment.
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by purple dinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      I LIKE IT ALOT, I think that you should keep writing. You have so much potential. Keep up the good work. . If you want email me at gothic_sweetness_420@yahoo.com I would love to hear from you
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by gothicsweetness | [ Reply to This ]
      ok I know you're not supposed to give alot of compliments, but I can't help it, this piece was written by god himself. I love it. I'll read more of you.
    It made me feel like I am on top of the world, it made me feel good, it made me feel like god, it made me feel so damn good inside my heart, thank you.
    I have nothing to say along the lines of improving it.
    how the hell could a 15 year old write this?
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]


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