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    dots Submission Name: Prophecy in Blooddots
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    Author: crazyphreshone
    ASL Info:    31/M/NewYork
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 66/69/30
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 353
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 837



    Description:
       a verse fresh out the oven,written in a nostalgic trance...


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    dotsProphecy in Blooddots
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    The Devine All-Knowing,All-Seeing had it planned
    His omnipotent,infinite,everlasting grip knew all along...

    Once upon a childs impressionable brain,
    I believed there was a real reason I remain;
    carrying on in existance thats absoluty insane;
    blessed with visions of a reality extremely inhumane.
    Personally introduced to death at a very young age.
    False prophecies of a unique individual leading the way.
    Blindly carrying on life destined to decay,
    too late to put together the torture and blood to be paid...

    No rest for the wicked,
    my life exists on the streets.
    You look at me,
    and think you know what i am.
    Just a reflection of your souls,
    which are blind to his silence,
    spending life inside your head...




    Submitted on 2004-10-02 22:43:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece. What drew me to it was actually the title. That's why I really read it however when I read it I found more than I was expecting and what I found was awesome. It is a really powerful piece and I can hear the emotion and feelings behind this piece. This is a good write and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by Lightbringer | [ Reply to This ]
      Judging by your poem, you have had a hard life, but are thankful for. I can tell however, that you believe in fate and you believe that things happen as the Divine Being wishes them to, and that your life is what he wants it to be, and you don't seem bothered by it, but instead feel rather thankful he has blessed you with such unfortune, and that other people with less difficult lives have not gained as much as you.

    Am I getting this right at all? This is just what I perceive from the poem. Please correct me if I am wrong. A power poem that required one to think...I like it. Myself, like you I am supposing, I feel a certain strength from the misfortunes that have occured in my own life, so I can relate to this piece. Good work.
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]


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