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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: Timmy S. Edgar
    ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263/200/71
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1365
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    Description:
       i wrote this poem for my first true love, she is nothing yet inspirational for me she is my love my soulmate and my muse

    i love you Heather


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    dotsLovedots
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    Itís a feeling, itís a buzz
    In my heart, your love provoked
    Pinch myself, itís a dream
    Itís my mind, in love, itís soaked

    Was it fate? Was it chance?
    That brought our souls together
    Or was it luck? Or god above?
    Replaced my emptiness, forever

    Only once for me, itís my turn
    Its mine, itís yours, now itís ours
    Be what it may, call it a blessing
    Joined as one, committed love vows

    Timmy Edgar




    Submitted on 2004-03-02 12:19:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      love this* the natural high of being in love it's so great. i love how you write so deep in so few lines. just great i tell you**
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that you need to do something to stand out. Most of the poetry on this site is either moon/spoon/june love poetry or awful/jawful anguished stuff. This isn't a bad effort, but it blends in too much. I don't object to love poetry, but it has to have something else to jump out at me.
    | Posted on 2004-03-02 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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