I think the speaker may be addressing him/her-self. Not enough clues for a conclusion though. The one word lone "nor" is a bit awkward. Try combining and also completing the "have not heard" part. Promising, ike an appetiser.
O.K. - This poem raises more qustions than it answers. So be it! That was it's intent. It's title is a question, and the poem itself is a question. The only things I coulsd suggest is to say," I'm worried"," if you wish to personify the speaker, and maybe a question mark at the end of, "Where are you". Otherwise, it's a short and provocative poem, and I enjoyed reading it. Good work.
To me the first line seems rather abnormal. Shouldn't it be 'I am...'? I agree that the poem is direct but at the same time it leaves a lot to be wanted out of this, like a book without it's last chapter.
Deep emotions swish within, wondering where you've been.
That just left me like "Yes...and...oh what happens next? Do they come back or what?" Thats what I like in a write, the imagination of the readers that can interpret the same write in so many different ways. The reader can have their own ending. Great write!
yes direct and to the point, but if you find out where the second party is, I'd love to see this expanded, twas gripping and actually posed 2 questions, are you here, and who is she looking for, puzzling, nicely done...Bob:)
This could be directed to a feeling within one's self, a loved one, a TV show, anything really...it's quite quirky that way. I really like it. Especially the way the emotions "swish"...that was a cute way to phrase it. Short, to the point, and express what we all feel sometime in our lives when something we love suddenly disappears. Good work...
it was so short and so to the point that i don't have a lot to say about it.i hope that if you are concerned about someone that is near and dear to you,they will be alright as well as your self.good luck and fare well.
*sighs* I dunno...I just give up...grammar corrections definately need to be made, lots of frags also here...okay, i thought that if I read some of your other work...id see some rather good stuff...but...*sighs* Imma go now to another author...sorry..