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Come Back To Me


Author: Yousef
ASL Info:    26/M/Egypt
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Words: 340
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Is it possible that she will come back to me one day?!


Come Back To Me



I know it’s hard to make the things I did undone
But like they say you don’t know what you got till it’s gone
Every thing have changed but I’m still the same
And when I listen to my heart I hear it call your name
I’ve got all my life to live and I want to live it with you
And I really want to show you that my heart is so true
When I opened my eyes and found that you are not there I lost control
Because you are the only one for me you are my heart you are my soul
All I want from you is a promise that you will be there
All I need from you is a sign that you really care
I really want us to come back together
I need you here tonight I need you more than ever
I want to be beside you when it’s time to die
Because without you there is no sun in my sky
You are the one I dreamed off all my life
You are the one and I can’t dream of a better wife
Life will be much better if you are here
Life will be worth living if you are near
I just can’t get you out of my mind
Because a girl like you is so hard to find
Baby I need you back to set me free
Just give me one last chance come back to me

Yousef Hani




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  aaww so much pain + desperation yet so much hope. My fave. "I want to be beside you when it’s time to die
Because without you there is no sun in my sky" this makes me realise how important this person is in your life and also the fact that she give you life when she is with you and there is no life there as there is no sun without her- great contrast with the connection with nature.A lot of what i read in this poem reminds me a lot of many songs and phrases i have heard all crammed into one poem, which is no disadvantage beacuse it creates good imagery and feelings xxxx thankyou for sharing xxx
| Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by callycat | [ Reply to This ]
  Ooo, she needs to see this piece. It was at least make her rethink why she left, no matter what you did to prompt her to leave. I thought it was beautiful. It flowed nicely, except the two longer lines there in the middle, but upon a re-read, I discovered that those lines are necessary, so don't change them. I really liked this poem, it shows so much emotion and the longing you have. Good work...
| Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]
  it sure seems that you are passionate about someone and that you emotionally rendered over her.not to cause you to fear or to be alarmed but it came across to me as though this relationship is over.good luck and fare well.
| Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmmmm...I guess that would depend upon why she left...? Nicely expressed piece...the rhymes did not feel forced but flowed nicely...good job, over-all, I'd say.
| Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
  im sure you probably already read everyone else's comments and heard that you needed a brush over with this and that...i still say that the idea is overall good and to me that overalls everything-altho it would be fantastic if everythng else kinda pieced itself together. butttttt...keep up the work and if you havent already tried it, try reading your work outloud-it can really save you words, time and produce an even better piece.
| Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by MizCandy05 | [ Reply to This ]


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