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    dots Submission Name: wonderful world?dots
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    Author: nameless_nobody
    ASL Info:    18 in a few days.
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 333/421/67
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1325
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 752



    Description:
       got the lyrics from an old song and changed the lyrics a bit to reflect the modern world better. its kinda shitty but what ya gona do. all coments welcome


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    dotswonderful world?dots
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    I see trees chopped........ red roses too
    I watch 'em burn..... for me and for you
    And I think to myself.... what a wonderful world.

    I see poluted skies..... destruction rife
    dark depressed days.... cold sleepless nights
    And I think to myself .....what a wonderful world.

    The colors of a death.....so scarey ..in the sky
    Are there on the faces.....of people ..going by
    I see friends shaking hands.....sayin'.. how do you do
    They're really sayin'......I hate you.

    I hear babies starve...... I watch them die
    they will feel less pain.....than than the ones that survive
    And I think to myself .....what a .........world




    Submitted on 2004-10-04 14:23:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I always like hearing parodies. This one sounds like something they would put on Adult Swim or the Simpsons. Definitely a bit pessimistic, but well-done.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is kinda scary. I like this alot. i like the last stanza best just kinda sums up the f*cked up place. you did good. I didn't recognize the song it came from at first but then i did. Good job.
    Pryncess
    PS i learned a new word from this poem cool beans
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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