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    dots Submission Name: Confuseddots
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    Author: Beast
    ASL Info:    24/ M/ Planet Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 232/133/28
    Words: 304
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I'm not much of a poet, but this poem (and its second part) mean a lot to me.


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    I am confused, did I really love her or it was mere dream?!
    I must know the truth before my mind ends to his extreme
    If it wasnt love, then why I was attached to that girl?
    And why in my eyes she was like a pearl?
    Did I really love her?
    Did I really care?
    I dont deny that I did care
    But illusion was my love to her
    With me she was so kind
    And a good heart in her I did find
    But I found that; she is not my type, and I am not her style
    Thinking about the whole matter makes me wanna stop for a while
    A message in her eyes I could read
    That it was a bad choice indeed
    I told her finally that I want her just to be my friend
    She kindly accepted, and for my love that was the end
    But what about the young lady who came from the dark
    She came in the night like a lightning spark
    Her arrival was not expected
    Although, she was by me accepted
    She treats me nice, she treats me fair
    But saying what I am feeling, I dont dare
    She looks like a white dove flying with the wind
    Or may be like a tulip in the spring end
    She is simple, quite and decent
    I am starting to like her, although she is in my life recent
    I can hear you saying: beware!
    Dont worry, I will take care
    Who knows what could happen in the future!
    Who knows, time is a big butcher
    Time proved that my love was fake
    It proved that the ocean was just a lake
    And now I think it is time for me to go
    And all I got to say is: adios amigo




    Submitted on 2004-10-04 15:09:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey this was a good poem, but i would suggest to you that try going in for a free verse next time, you know poetry without rhyming, not that this wasn't good, but you klnow in some places it was rather forced rhyming, thats what i used to do, and still sometimes do, so i use my heart to write, if it rhymed it does beautifully, if it doesn't it doesn't. well thats my style. love is confusing, but its such a beautiful confusing feeling. dont you think so, yaser? anyways, liked this poem, take care. lol!!

    Zu
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem, well written too, I really liked the part that says "Time proved that my love was fake, It proved that the ocean was just a lake", these two lines are really beautiful, Good effort and Good luck .
    | Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem! i like it very much but i have to say that i never did agree with love... but fake love is there and tends to betray us all.
    Great Poem!
    Take Care
    Jes
    | Posted on 2004-10-19 00:00:00 | by Jesimine | [ Reply to This ]



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