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    dots Submission Name: Dannydots
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    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This poem is for a nine year old boy, who has been throu' alot. And well, l love him...He is not my child, but nevertheless. My heart beats for him too.


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    dotsDannydots
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    Burned into my heart,
    and you are not even
    a part of my own blood.
    You are tho' the bravest
    soul l do know.
    l am behind you each
    and every day,
    because you are
    so brave.
    Stay that way,
    please don't change.
    Danny,
    Your mom loves you for you.....
    The loving caring little man
    you are...
    You're burned within the earths core.
    Love- is what you are.
    Don't change.
    Danny,
    stay strong and burn
    like a shooting star,
    continue being who you are.
    The loving caring little man
    you are...




    Submitted on 2004-10-05 10:50:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, this is a really good poem. It's very clear that you care a lot about Danny. It flows very well, and I wouldn't change anything. Great job
    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by xana | [ Reply to This ]
      That is good as usual.
    Very sweet and well-written poem and I think you love that little Danny as much as his mom loves him and that is clear at your poem. I like your last lines:
    " stay strong and burn
    like a shooting star,
    continue being who you are.
    The loving caring little man
    you are... " They are something like a little piece of advicing him to stay strong and brave as he is. I'm all egar to see little Danny who got your interest and make you write a whole poem about him... I hope I were him ... just kidding.
    Khaled.
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]
      a quirky little poem.i don't know if you are a parent or a friend of the character in the poem.obviously you are someone who cares and that is a good thing.good luck and fare well.
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]


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