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    dots Submission Name: I Always Have Wingsdots
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    Author: max
    ASL Info:    27 m tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 152/191/55
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI Always Have Wingsdots
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    No matter what the day may bring
    no matter what the day proclaims
    no matter how much the sun or moon accuses,
    no matter what the men of earth charge me with

    no matter how the ground curses me,
    no matter how the stars pout,
    no matter how the seas scream
    no matter how God kicks and cries and shouts

    no matter how the Devil laughs
    and tries to condemn,
    no matter how time deploys notions
    of no pity for us,
    no matter the deepest hatreds
    of human hearts toward me

    no matter the brigade of demons searching,
    no matter if they seek me intently

    no matter how that no gold
    is at the end of the rainbow
    no matter how they preach that
    the world will end,
    no matter how much I seem to owe
    no matter how little they seem to desire to lend

    no matter the failures, the broken hearts,
    the unremembered dreams,
    ~~~I always have wings.




    Submitted on 2004-10-05 13:28:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awesome! theres a coupla no matter hows that just dont work for me but all up...
    i always have wings... i can fly away... i dont have to be bound by their small mindedness... i can faly away and be all i wanna be...
    i love it!
    i think it would be interesting to have a play round and try to rewrite this without so many 'no matter now's... could be an interesting challenge but i am sure it is do able... lemme know if you decide to give it a shot... id be interested to see what you came up with...
    | Posted on 2004-11-26 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with Up N' Aroused. You overused "No matter" entirely too often. Maybe leave it off of most of the lines except the ones that begin the stanzas.
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I think the point is made very clearly. A little too clearly for my taste though as the words 'no matter' are overly used in my opinion, that should be your main concern if/when you come to revise this. How to lose the repetition and keep the piece going, that would present a challenge...write on...
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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