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    dots Submission Name: The "Mourning" Afterdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Venting
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       ok so this is tied in with the situation with my ex best friend that I wrote about in the piece "A Broken Vow" and "In a Dream". I still dont kow what to think...I was told he asked another friend of mine about me recentley but I am too afraid to try and open conversation with him.I dunno.


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    dotsThe "Mourning" Afterdots
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    You know I saw They Might be Giants
    Play the other day in New York city
    As always they were amazing
    I just couldn’t shake the feeling
    Something was missing

    Who am I trying to kid
    You were missing
    But you’ve been gone a while

    And I cant tell you
    How many times I saw something
    Or read something and grabbed the phone
    Just to be hit by the memory
    That I was cast aside

    So I walk along
    Fighting off the thoughts
    I walk along
    Trying not to mourn
    The brothers gone




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      well I know what's going on in this one! They Might Be Giants kick more ass than an ass kicking machine in a vat full of ass. This piece touched me because I know that. And I also know what it's like to see them without your best friend.
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      thats the killer... going to pick up the fone or the "i must remember to tell... about this..." and then realising that in fact you wont be telling them anything... and EVERYTHING ALWAYS reminds you of that person... i ummm... i have it with a boy i loved who killed himself... everything always reminds me of him and while i was away on holiday just a coupla weeks ago i saw a shirt he would LOVE and went to buy it for him forgetting completely that he wouldnt be wearing it... i know its kinda extreme but yeah... this is what your write made me think... i hope maybe one day you and your friend can mend the rift and check out 'They Might be Giants ' together... one day... who knows... awesome write
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...
    ' just to be hit by the memory
    i was cast aside'...
    perfect...absolutely perfect

    my friend was right...you're very talened!

    i'm going to have to read all your work now...yep going to be blind by the end of the day...
    just read ALL of mixedemotions00 work and a few others on post now yours...and it's only noon...holy good day at Elite
    thanks for sharing this heart wrenching tale of misplaced love.
    kelly
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      this i can completly relate to only in a stupid girly sorta way (excuse it)
    maya and i had a big blow up fight and didnt talk for months
    and it sucked because were best friends too
    and then one day i went and saw kevin devine and she wasnt there
    and it was one of those things she needed to be there for for me to really have a good time
    so i called her and let her hear
    and texted her about how its stupid we dont talk and pretend we dont care
    and then we were friends again
    isnt that how its gone for us eventaully you just realize your being stupid (and by you i mean both of you)
    this is an AMAZING peice
    beucase its pretty simple but conveys so much that i cant
    this one of my favorites ever
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by scorpio sphinx | [ Reply to This ]
      um...interesting...it was a good poem..and i hope u can keep writing the way ur writing now...i look forward for more of ur poems! keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by Wolfdawn | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a very good poem keep up the good writing okay if you ever need anyone to talk to email me at gaycody@mailpuppy.com
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by John cody Holt | [ Reply to This ]
      This, once again, brought me back to my former friendship. I am usually all for patching things up and making things happy; I don't like things to end on a bad note. Let me just say, though, that I took that step to make things okay, and it did not turn out well-even though I was under the impression (by a third party) that it would. Although, I must say, the result really pissed me off and made it a hell of a lot easier to move on and no longer miss my "friend." Now the friendship is nearly forgotton. Anyway, I understand the feeling of your loss and how things can remind you of your times together; I would advise you, if it would make YOU feel better, to go ahead and try to make amends-however, don't go into it expecting anything. Be prepared for either outcome. I'm sorry to ramble and I'm sorry if this doesn't help you. It's just that it hits close to home. I wish you luck. Keep us posted. Hey, maybe you've already had a conversation with your friend and this doesn't matter now? Anyway, I liked the poem and can relate...
    | Posted on 2004-11-01 00:00:00 | by ber | [ Reply to This ]


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