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    dots Submission Name: Welcome Homedots
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    Author: drkpoet
    ASL Info:    21/m/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 442/527/94
    Words: 309
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 474
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1725



    Description:
       just some feelings.....


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    dotsWelcome Homedots
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    The boy,
    sitting in the corner of the darkness of the hollow room.
    Waiting on his supper to be brought.
    He sits there, lifeless
    careless.

    His family disowns him,
    Hes dead to all society.
    Plans for his death come quickly to his mind.
    only 12 years old
    And death is prominate in his head.

    Dreams of ropes,
    guns,
    water,
    knifes
    Enter dwelling in the deep brain that could be you.

    How does things like this happen?
    Why does such things exist
    in small kids,
    in a family place where things are worth while.

    A knock comes faintly at his window,
    a bird comes to carry him away.
    upon its wings the little boy crawls,
    vaguly whispers thank you,
    for his body was weak, and his speak slurred.

    taken care by who he knows as friends
    friends take the depression away,
    make the hurt that dwells within
    come outloud,
    and express the things he feels.

    Now hes top of the line gentleman,
    and makes riches and wealth,
    and his mom wants him back.

    A little boy once,
    never paid attention to,
    makes riches,
    and they want him back.

    a boy growing to age 34
    with a disease
    of cancer
    dwelling within his body.

    Sitting in his 12 floor office building
    he hears a faint knocking at his window,
    its God,
    I'm here to take you home.

    The grown boy climbs into his arms,
    and for once, he feels at home.




    Submitted on 2004-10-05 19:08:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Man, you've got talent. I don't know where you get your creative juices from, but it's there. All I can say is keep pouring it out on paper.
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by Cayman | [ Reply to This ]
      wow,this one is so good,and I rarely say that about a poem.I loved the story line and it was just awesome,I can't see anything wrong with it,wow great job!
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by ColdinSummer | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm...it was about a boy...at the age of 12 dealing with his parents not wanting him, and thoughts of suicide...and then he gets by it with the help of his friends, the depression goes away...and then...he grows up like everyone does...and gets cancer...but before that he gets rich and his parents want him back...and then at the age of 34 he gets cancer and dies...in his office. It was good...but...crazy good...
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by Broken_Bruised | [ Reply to This ]



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