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    dots Submission Name: Could it Be?dots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsCould it Be?dots
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    Could it be the way mommy yells,
    Could it be the way daddy hits,
    Could it be how I was neglected,
    As to why I dont care anymore?

    Thrown onto the streets,
    As if I wasnt there.
    'I love you' has never petruded lips,
    When I was around.

    Could it be the way I wasnt wanted,
    Could it be how I was forgotten,
    Or could it be how no one loved,
    As to why I want to leave?

    Never to come back,
    What could it be?




    Submitted on 2004-10-05 20:57:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      now i really hope your ok.. i was up most of last night hoping you'd come back.. i don't know what your feeling if you don't tell me.. i really got the feeling something was wrong yesterday.. im sorry for being an idiot.. I love you more than you can ever know.. you can tell me anything.. im sorry..
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh, i can relate all too well, the emotions that are present are great!.. tells the agony of the writer, and the want for those words "i love you" the question at the end is great, it makes the reader keep pondering on the emotions that are present!.. nice work
    | Posted on 2004-10-05 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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