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    dots Submission Name: love at all the wrong... pt. 3dots
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    Author: mixedemotions00
    ASL Info:    21/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 561/361/63
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    Description:
       the full title is "love at all the wrong times (pt. 3). It's the final in the "Blue Moon" trilogy. Actually, there may be more to write in a the near future, but I don't know if I'll continue this set.

    It's been awhile since I've been here, but I hope there are still some open arms!


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    dotslove at all the wrong... pt. 3dots
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    My heart
    is torn in twos and threes,
    is being ripped apart
    where there are no seams.
    I don’t love him,
    I confess,
    and says he’s fine-
    but the pain in his voice
    betrays him
    as he tells me, “Sweet dreams.”

    I want to love him.
    I want to be ok with his arms,
    his eyes,
    his love surrounding me
    and filling the cracks
    in my weary, trodden heart.

    But try as I may,
    love exudes me
    this one time it should not.
    I cannot fall,
    cannot desperately plunge
    into the promise
    of protection
    and security
    and whispered devotions to each other’s hearts.

    It would’ve worked
    this time.
    I wouldn’t have been hurt
    this time.
    He would’ve loved me,
    said it and meant it,
    and resounded it
    this time.

    He promised;
    I tried to believe.




    Submitted on 2004-10-06 00:52:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I come upon third and final instalment, my voice quakes, sweat brakes out upon my brow, and i begin to read...
    amber is right it does sound like a trust issue, or it seems as if you feel you are causeing him pain or internal strife... you should open up to him and speak what you feel, and ask him if there is something on his mind.
    believe...
    ~she
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by SHEslaysME | [ Reply to This ]
      ok this is the third i'm off to find the rest...read this last night and fell...ahhh
    beautiful a soft flowing whisper leaving chills down my spine...
    i'm not giving too much of thought till i get MORE
    it was just soooo late when i read last night

    but i wanted to say it here too, you have an open set of arms right here...you post, i'll read
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      i'd like to say that i'm the same but i don't know your true inner workings. i wear my heart on my sleeve the let every girl try on my jacket. broken hearts breed broken trust and such is our way i guess. your writing was superb and i enjoyed it thoroughly.
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Butterfly Bullets | [ Reply to This ]
      It's SAD...it really is...Very good way of putting it down in words...I liked it...I have had issues like that before (with a girl, cuz i'm a guy) ...The poem was really Good N E ways, I hope the best for you
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm sounds like a trust issue.. a good poem.. well planned.. and yes there are still open arms here! YAY FOR YOU! such a sad poem.. but i really like it. i have trust issues.. my boyfriend is very patient though.. he understands that my past is not a perfect calm.. hey if you want a little laugh you should read my newest poem! I would appreciate a comment! but as for your poem GO YOU!
    ~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]



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