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Author:	Beast
ASL Info:	24/ M/ Planet Earth
Elite Ratio:	4.94 - 232/133/28
Words:	263

Class/Type:	Poetry/Venting
Total Views:	731
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I thought a lot before writing this note
Why should I let them know what I sought?
What the hell, who cares what they will say
What the hell, I gonna do it anyway
I dont wanna stay in this wretched world any longer
Especially when these horrible feelings -chocking me- are getting stronger
And why should I stay when I have nothing to lose or gain?
Why should I stay when I am so sick of the pain?
Now, the question is: How I am gonna do it?
Who cares, as long as it is quick and painless
I need something to suit this creative mind and this miserable life
If I am going, then I will go with style…I guess I’m losing it
I found it, it is brilliant…no, it is perfect
Aint it ironic that only after I die I might thrive?
And this will be my final revenge
They will wonder and wonder, but they wont know the truth
They will keep questioning, whether it is murder or natural cause
But they wont know the truth
I wish I could see their faces after I am gone
I wish I could see their faces after what is done is done
Just that thought makes me at ease
Just that thought will give me peace
Now I am ready to go
But, I feel that there is still one last thing to do
I must erase my traces
Nothing should lead to what I sought
I guess now there’s no need for this suicide note…

*Paper-tearing sound*

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  Well..did you do it?

I mean. They poem is nice.
But commiting suicide is old and corny. Try something more...new. Original.
Honestly. This whole "I'm in pain, life sucks, I hate everyone" is way overrated.

| Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by Korras | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. Very interesting. Definelty written through strong emotions. A different approach to this type of letter. And the ending is very good. A big turn around. And it keeps all in wondering. I like it, great write. A good way to let out alot of frustration.
| Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a very good poem. I think it is very well written and i think it has a very well made point to it. Keep up the good work.

R.Bayden
| Posted on 2006-08-06 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]
  This was very nicely planned out. I really liked the ending, also. I have a suicide note on my site, too, but that one was actually real so it doesn't really have a plot at all. The person in this poem was filled with such saddness, anger, and confusion with the world that they felt the world didn't deserve an explanation. I love it. Simply a masterpiece!

=Ayane=
| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this. It let you through a story of pain and ect. And, the dismal feeling that nothing could be done. Then at the end, I went, "Huh...". It was an interesting piece that made me think. There was almost a prolonging of the inevitable.....kinda a worthless last 5 minutes spent writing a note out that you didn't need anyway. Perhaps there was doubt in the mind and that's why the note was written? Who knows.......

Good write.

BCute<3
| Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought I read your featured poem in return. I felt this was more of random thoughts then a poem. I felt you did not keep a steady flow, nor use much imagination with your rhyming, where you did rhyme. I was not to fond of your featured work either...different styles I guess. I think your poem was clustered like the thoughts it conveyed. I missed the humor in this completely. Where you being serious, or mocking suicide notes?

Maggie

| Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  I LOVE THIS POEM! i had to read it over and over to truly get it

he still killed himself in the end- he hated everbody so much, that even with his death, he wanted people to worry and be miserable
this person was truly disturbed, he loved nobody but people loved him back..

this is the best poem i have read.
i added this to my favotorites,, please respond back to me
| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by UnHoLyPoPe | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this...finally, not a self pitying suicide poem. It shows how confused and angry suicide is. Never have attempted but known too many who have succeeded. I also disagree wholeheartedly with Moon Dreamer, this poem is perfect as is.
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
  Your work reminds me of how much I love this world. We are able to create emotions from the simplest of words and string them together to become something greater. I commend you for your work and now i'm going to take a soak.
Juan. aka Johnny boy.
| Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by johnny boy | [ Reply to This ]
  Thanx for your comment on suicide I liked your version of suicide as it shows someone pissed off at life mine shows the people you leave behinds version in 43 years I have known many people who have offed themself some for pleasure some as others did not accept who they were and I had someone commit siuicide because we were breaking up and she did it in the bathroom while I was packing thats been 25 years or so since then.yesterdays theme on submissions seemed all to be suicide so over the next week I will probably submit 3 or 4 more all in different concepts of opinion when i write i dont vent I try to create a picture of life that makes people think maybe i should suggest to you reading Lovers Wilderness Once again thanx for the comments and I enjoyed your thoughts on suicidesandman
| Posted on 2004-12-08 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  That's a good one indeed, I give it a 5, because whenever the reader couldn't determine whether these words are for real or just words, then the writer reached his prime, his peak as no one was able to know the truth, like the actor he reaches his prime when no one could know whether he's acting or not, I really liked the last two lines "Nothing should lead to what I sought, I guess now there’s no need for this suicide note…", these words are stirring, Good job, I liked it.
| Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
  there was a time when i tried to read all the suicides on this siet, needless to say i failed miserably, couldn't read more than 6, there was so much of sadness there. this one isnt so much sad. indeed its more of revengeful. the ending was beautiful. you know not the stereotype ending. but again rhyming, it doesn't have to rhyme, thats the main principle, so most of the time unrhyming poems are better than rhyming. thts what i feel anyways. buthey great ending!!

Zu
| Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
  well i usually am pretty decent with my comments, but it sounds like a monster wrote this note.. someone who dosent care about their life let alone anothers.. i would go on to tell you just how sick i became while reading it but i think you get the point now.. well those are my thoughts on it..
| Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
  The feeling behind this note is very strong, but I hope you don't mean it. Maybe a follow up to this that explains your plan because now I'm curious. I would like to see the rest of the story. But take a hint from Tome Sawyer and Huck Finn it's more fun to crash yor own funeral than be in the box.
| Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by firebanshee | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this! what i get from reading it is that it is not about the suicide itself but the aftermath, the rememberance! it is absolutely fantastic!
Great work!
Yours truly and darkly!
Jes
| Posted on 2004-10-19 00:00:00 | by Jesimine | [ Reply to This ]

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