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    dots Submission Name: The way we see thingsdots
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    Author: lost and alone
    ASL Info:    19/F/Sandiego,CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 159/140/58
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 276
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 630



    Description:
       I was actually just processing some thoughts, My boyfriend, and I have been doing so much better, but on thursday, he broke and smashed his nuckle on his index finger of his right hand and now he can't work. So it's kind of hard to deal with him he's crancky and irrtiable.


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    dotsThe way we see thingsdots
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    We all seam to see things differently.
    I see them one way,
    You see them another.
    We shouldn't save our stress,
    So we can take it out on each other.
    But... sometimes we do.
    I know sometimes we can't help it.
    It doesn't mean we love eachother any less.
    It just means we need,
    To blow off some steem,
    Take a load off our shoulders.
    And sometimes that means,
    handing them to someone else.
    Not throwing it at them,
    But asking them for just a little help.
    In the end we all realize,
    we all need a little help.




    Submitted on 2004-10-06 10:06:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      there were some slight errors in different areas of your poem but i disagree that you should not get personal in your poetry.i'm sure that most of the most effective poetry is very personal and i think that you should continue in this direction if it so pleases you.good luck and fare well.
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the message and it's positive, space between each other and steem=steam, other than that, I saw where you were going with this and I enjoyed the positive message...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      Well as weird as this may sound: You should never get personal in your poems ! This seems more like a normal dialogue with your boyfriend than a poem. Also your rhyme scheme (if it is intentional) needs some work.
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]



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