Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Chosen, The (aka Confused 2)dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Beast
    ASL Info:    24/ M/ Planet Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 232/133/28
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 352
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1328



    Description:
       The sequel of my previous poem (Confused)


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsChosen, The (aka Confused 2)dots
    -------------------------------------------


    I want to write a thousand poems about her
    About the girl whom about I really care
    I want to write & write till my words end
    About the girl whom towards my heart trend
    She is sweet, intelligent & kind
    A one like her is really hard to find
    She came from the deep dark like a flare
    And her kind in this time is quite rare
    Maybe she isn’t gorgeous, but who cares!
    And who cares about beauty when the girl got manners as hers
    To me, she is like a white swan in a lake
    And this time I think my love is not an illusion & it is not fake
    Now she is my life, she is every thing I am living for
    She came into my life & opened for love a new door
    She knows nothing of my feelings towards her till today
    And I won’t tell her, because what I’m feeling I don’t dare to say
    She is a lady and I am her knight, & I will dedicate to her every victory of mine
    I am a beast & she is my master, & with her enemies I will dine
    She came and melted the ice on my feelings while it was being frozen
    I think she is the one…I think she is the chosen…

    =*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=*=
    [I wrote this poem about 5 years ago, and I have never told her...]




    Submitted on 2004-10-06 14:19:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Why didn't you tell her???????????????? I never understand guys, even though I grew up with a bunch. A lovely poem, heartfelt and sweet. "She is a lady and I am her knight, & I will dedicate to her every victory of mine" this line made me all mushy. Mostly coz I was thinking of a friend of mine, who is just like that. Thanks for a sweet read.

    Love,

    Soph
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
      shnit man!! this one was great!! you started out with the usual rhyming pattern but somewherein the middle, the poem totally changed, like totally. it became so passionate, beautiful man. you must love this girl very much. the part about you being her beast and dining with her enemies was totally awsome!!!

    but i didn't understand the line

    "About the girl whom towards my heart trend"

    perhaps its just me, but could you explain it? huh? anyways, great poem again!!

    Zu
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
      AMAZING, Fascinating poem indeed, well written and well presented too, the words are soft but powerful, and the finale is UNIQUE "She came and melted the ice on my feelings while it was being frozen, I think she is the one…I think she is the chosen…". WOW...
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      aww.. i love the feelings you get with every line, everyline just speaks with thousands of emotions, i like that. i also like how u use metaphors to compare her... thats great, hopfully you'll get to let her know how it is that you feel... good luck with that, and in the mean time, keep em coming.
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.