roses are red violets are blue you light up my life and I love you
structure to it. which is so common at this site. which, in my opinion, becomes very boring after a while.
yeah thanks for your feedback. in my opinion, it's a pretty good piece. I like the end especially. it ends abruptly and bluntly, I like that. and it rings of truth.
and hey, nothing wrong with the "roses are red, violets are blue" layout, but I just think it's a little childish. hey, this site is built on opinions and opinions only. every one reads each others poetry, and gives their opinion on it. that's all I'm doing, giving my opinion.
Hmmm.i not trying to be a jerk or nothing, but i think the piece needs a complete make over,the "love is life","love is death" sentences could be expended and perhaps refined with other words.Just a suggestion,your intentions are obviously sweet, but the sturcture's a some what of a mess, and perhaps it has to do with that of"love",sometimes love disrupts the mental state,maybe that was the whole point of the piece.hmmm, i wonder.-Vlad09
no kidding emma... your topic was good, but i don't go for the love is this, love is this #2, love is this #3. Truly it does get predictable and thus, boring...a variety of emotion might help out as well.