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What I'd give

Author: winged_writer_robyn
ASL Info:    16/f/wa
Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116 /162 /44
Words: 158
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Oh, God.... have you ever written something without thinking and then realized "THAT'S how I feel?!" ...Wow...Sorry, I'm new to the whole "true love" thing. doug has got me mad crazy. I know these are strong words for a 16 year old, but God I'd give the world for that boy. He's means more than...more than chocolate on PMS! (for all you guys, that's A LOT) he's amazing, wonderful...undescribable. I love him. God, I LOVE HIM (**stares blankly in disbelief at those words**) those words, finally, have meaning... OMG a breakthrough.

What I'd give

If I could
catch every star
that cascaded over me
each time we kissed...
I would toss them up
into the sky
to trade them
for you.
If I had the power
to cause a single, glorious rose
to bloom
at my fingertips
each time you took my hand
in yours...
I would make a bouque
and trade it
for you.
If I could
somehow weave together
the moonbeams
with the sun's morning rays
and create a warm blanket
that covered us
every time we embraced
I'd cover the world
and trade it
for you.
You mean more
to me
than the world...
more precious
than the stars in the sky,
more lovely
than the roses in bloom,
more perfect
than sun and moonbeams intwined.
The world can have it all,
beacuse I have all I need,
right here,
with you...
You are my love,
My friend.

Submitted on 2004-10-06 18:11:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very well done! Isn't it amazing , after you write something you put it down for a moment then read it and you're astonished that those feelings are yours! Keep writing!
| Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by TeddyD | [ Reply to This ]
  I absolutely love this, its so amazing, and so what if they're strong for a 16 year old, they're absolutely brilliant. The imagery was brilliant, trading all those different things'm speechless beyond that, this has to go in favourites, for this is how I feel about someone right now. Brilliant job!
| Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a very extremely well written poem and it is a true and beautiful description of how the way love should go. Like the way Janet put" thats the way love goes". Magnificent!
| Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by SexyRomeo | [ Reply to This ]

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