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    dots Submission Name: What I'd givedots
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    Author: winged_writer_robyn
    ASL Info:    16/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116/162/44
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 848
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    Description:
       Oh, God.... have you ever written something without thinking and then realized "THAT'S how I feel?!" ...Wow...Sorry, I'm new to the whole "true love" thing. doug has got me mad crazy. I know these are strong words for a 16 year old, but God I'd give the world for that boy. He's means more than...more than chocolate on PMS! (for all you guys, that's A LOT) he's amazing, wonderful...undescribable. I love him. God, I LOVE HIM (**stares blankly in disbelief at those words**) those words, finally, have meaning... OMG a breakthrough.


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    dotsWhat I'd givedots
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    If I could
    catch every star
    that cascaded over me
    each time we kissed...
    I would toss them up
    into the sky
    to trade them
    for you.
    If I had the power
    to cause a single, glorious rose
    to bloom
    at my fingertips
    each time you took my hand
    in yours...
    I would make a bouque
    and trade it
    for you.
    If I could
    somehow weave together
    the moonbeams
    with the sun's morning rays
    and create a warm blanket
    that covered us
    every time we embraced
    I'd cover the world
    and trade it
    for you.
    You mean more
    to me
    than the world...
    more precious
    than the stars in the sky,
    more lovely
    than the roses in bloom,
    more perfect
    than sun and moonbeams intwined.
    The world can have it all,
    beacuse I have all I need,
    right here,
    with you...
    You are my love,
    My friend.




    Submitted on 2004-10-06 18:11:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well done! Isn't it amazing , after you write something you put it down for a moment then read it and you're astonished that those feelings are yours! Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by TeddyD | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely love this, its so amazing, and so what if they're strong for a 16 year old, they're absolutely brilliant. The imagery was brilliant, trading all those different things and...wow...I'm speechless beyond that, this has to go in favourites, for this is how I feel about someone right now. Brilliant job!
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very extremely well written poem and it is a true and beautiful description of how the way love should go. Like the way Janet put" thats the way love goes". Magnificent!
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by SexyRomeo | [ Reply to This ]


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