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    dots Submission Name: Dawn Of Lightdots
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    Author: winged_writer_robyn
    ASL Info:    16/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116/162/44
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 996
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    Description:
       one of my better works
    I just wrote this after reading "the choices we make" by another elite poet. Lately it seems like God has been warning me about the choices i am making. her poem was the "final blow". i broke down and wrote. God turned on that light. I've been hiding in the dark since the beginning of summer: my own best friend didn't know I'm a christian... i wouldn't know, either with the way i act. Anyway, this poem is about making that final commitment of giving it up to God: the one where, when you truely mean it, you get butterflies. yeah...


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    dotsDawn Of Lightdots
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    I blink...
    once,
    twice,
    over and over
    trying to adjust my eyes
    to the light
    turned on
    inside of me

    Something has shifted
    like sand right after
    high tide
    the light's turned on
    inside
    and...
    I'm changing

    I'm seeing things
    differently
    the world's a new place
    Rough edges have been smoothed
    my vision has improved
    I'm no longer afraid
    of that shadow lurking behind
    My focus is no longer on the dark
    but my eyes are on the light

    My face glows
    my heart knows
    no fear
    It is the dawn of a better day
    No longer will I say
    I'm afraid
    of what I do not know
    I will shine my light
    on the path that is right
    for me
    I will never loose track
    of where I tread
    nor will I ever tremble
    in the dark again
    I have restored my sight
    Something has begun
    the dawn of a new light.




    Submitted on 2004-10-06 18:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful. I loved this peice and the images of enlightenment stretch forth and embrace me as I read. All was perfectly placed to encapsulate the feeling and perpose of teh piece. Thank you for sharing
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
      there was a minute or two reading this that it tok my breathe litterly away. Ive felt like this so many times in the past i think you found the best way to handle the anger and sorrow that it bring to you. i wish there was a way i could write something this great that when someong reads it it takes their breath away. Very good job. keep it up love to see more from you
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Sean | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my gosh! I absolutely love this one! I, in the past, have felt this way before, and I'm so happy for you to get to experience it. It is a lift of the spirit into a higher realm. Congradulations. You have taken the first big step of self-transformation and enlightenment! This is a great poem! It has great feeling behind it. When you smile, others smile back.
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Victoria | [ Reply to This ]


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