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Dawn Of Light

Author: winged_writer_robyn
ASL Info:    16/f/wa
Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116 /162 /44
Words: 159
Class/Type: Poetry /Happy
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one of my better works
I just wrote this after reading "the choices we make" by another elite poet. Lately it seems like God has been warning me about the choices i am making. her poem was the "final blow". i broke down and wrote. God turned on that light. I've been hiding in the dark since the beginning of summer: my own best friend didn't know I'm a christian... i wouldn't know, either with the way i act. Anyway, this poem is about making that final commitment of giving it up to God: the one where, when you truely mean it, you get butterflies. yeah...

Dawn Of Light

I blink...
over and over
trying to adjust my eyes
to the light
turned on
inside of me

Something has shifted
like sand right after
high tide
the light's turned on
I'm changing

I'm seeing things
the world's a new place
Rough edges have been smoothed
my vision has improved
I'm no longer afraid
of that shadow lurking behind
My focus is no longer on the dark
but my eyes are on the light

My face glows
my heart knows
no fear
It is the dawn of a better day
No longer will I say
I'm afraid
of what I do not know
I will shine my light
on the path that is right
for me
I will never loose track
of where I tread
nor will I ever tremble
in the dark again
I have restored my sight
Something has begun
the dawn of a new light.

Submitted on 2004-10-06 18:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Beautiful. I loved this peice and the images of enlightenment stretch forth and embrace me as I read. All was perfectly placed to encapsulate the feeling and perpose of teh piece. Thank you for sharing
| Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
  there was a minute or two reading this that it tok my breathe litterly away. Ive felt like this so many times in the past i think you found the best way to handle the anger and sorrow that it bring to you. i wish there was a way i could write something this great that when someong reads it it takes their breath away. Very good job. keep it up love to see more from you
| Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Sean | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh my gosh! I absolutely love this one! I, in the past, have felt this way before, and I'm so happy for you to get to experience it. It is a lift of the spirit into a higher realm. Congradulations. You have taken the first big step of self-transformation and enlightenment! This is a great poem! It has great feeling behind it. When you smile, others smile back.
| Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Victoria | [ Reply to This ]

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