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    dots Submission Name: If the World Turned to Ashesdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I haven't been able to drag anything out of my brain that I like the past few days. This is from April, and I'm not 100% keen on it. Sometimes posting is a catalyst for my writing, so I thought I'd give it a shot.

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    dotsIf the World Turned to Ashesdots

    Would you care if the entire world
    turned to ashes around our bed?
    For I love you more than the sum
    of my love for everything else,
    and with the joy you just gave me,
    I could die without regret.

    Submitted on 2004-10-07 04:34:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good little love poem. it doesn't have the spark (no pun intended) your other poems have but it is very good nevertheless. I like the feeling you've described. the ultimate bliss when you're together with the person you love completely and you don't want to let go of this moment. I guess I'm a romantic. anyway I like it. well done, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      it was a joke on my part about the first time, lets hope it wasnt urs, then again that could be a good thing, lmao...either way it's a great piece, he probably thought so too, lol...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, was it actually that good, I remember my first time, so what if I was all alone, it was that good lmao, very nicely done and as small as it was it carried a loud message, I could hear you hollering here in phila, have a great day...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't help thinking about God the way you wrote this piece. That would explain perhaps why God gets so jealous when we ignore Him to chase after idols.

    This said a lot more than you probably intended.

    Very good indeed.

    (What is with the different poses in your pics? Are you hoping to get discovered?)
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      awwww... this is the feeling of contentment... and love... like the whole world could disappear and you prolly wouldnt notice (or give a damn when you finally did) so long as you had your boy beside you... very cool... good luck with fresh writings... my brain has completely stopped and wont give me anything decent at all so i know the frustration of the moment... ciao! (oh and gorgeous foto... i swear you just get more and more gorgeous every foto i see... go you!)
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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