Aw, that makes me happy. You're descriping the beautiful fall weather I'm having where I live now. Anways, I think when writing poetry, you shouldn't shorten words, i- and to &. I just think it makes the words look better if you write the word out.
spoofy! (my own word)this poem instills me with happy, warm and fuzzy feelings! *glomps Epiphany* heh heh! i am SO evil!*evill cackle* bwahahahaha! man did we get off subject! uh, where was i? ... ... ... ...oh yeah! warm fuzzy feelings! i like this poem!
This is awsome! I love the simplistic nature and I think that the rhyming at the end worked nicely with this poem. I usually don't like poetry that rhymes at the end of every line because it often hinders the ideas; not the case here. Thanks Peace