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    dots Submission Name: Falldots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 758
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 255



    Description:
       Just a quicky - Love, Peace, Joy!!!


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    dotsFalldots
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    Acorn have you lost your cap?
    Rising fall a game & trap.

    Squirrel now have you got your food?
    A lazy bear with time to brood.

    Brightly covered leaves will you fall?
    Everythings changing one & all.




    Submitted on 2004-10-07 17:10:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aw, that makes me happy. You're descriping the beautiful fall weather I'm having where I live now. Anways, I think when writing poetry, you shouldn't shorten words,
    i
    - and to &.
    I just think it makes the words look better if you write the word out.
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by Mariah | [ Reply to This ]
      spoofy! (my own word)this poem instills me with happy, warm and fuzzy feelings! *glomps Epiphany* heh heh! i am SO evil!*evill cackle* bwahahahaha! man did we get off subject! uh, where was i?
    ...
    ...
    ...
    ...oh yeah! warm fuzzy feelings! i like this poem!
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by darkness child | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awsome! I love the simplistic nature and I think that the rhyming at the end worked nicely with this poem. I usually don't like poetry that rhymes at the end of every line because it often hinders the ideas; not the case here. Thanks
    Peace
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]


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