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    dots Submission Name: Ode to ASLdots
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    Author: winged_writer_robyn
    ASL Info:    16/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116/162/44
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       I wrote this for my ASL (american sign language) teacher, mr. forshay. we communciate through signs and writing. he has gotten to know me through my poetry. it's truely amazing to "sign" my work. it's very expressive.


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    dotsOde to ASLdots
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    We speak
    two different languages:
    Voice and sign…
    But the language of unity,
    Of compassion and friendship
    remains the same.

    I speak
    with my lips:
    Words flow with ease,
    Rising and falling with pitch
    Like music.
    You speak
    with you hands:
    Words form in an intricate dance,
    They rise and fall with expression
    Like the tides of the sea.
    And yet we both understand
    The same rise and fall
    Shows we both have feelings
    and that we both speak
    from the heart.

    I listen
    with my ears:
    I can hear the laughter of a child
    Or the music of a full orchestra
    Any time I wish.
    You listen
    with you eyes:
    You see joy in your smiling children
    And you take pride when your students sign “I understand.”
    And yet we both understand that the world
    Is made up of so much more than noise;
    We know that there is no need for pointless talking
    When a simple smile can do.
    We understand the value of sight and sound:
    We both listen
    with our hearts.

    We are
    Different,
    You and I.
    We speak two different languages.
    Yet we understand
    no matter where we are from
    or how we communicate
    the language of our hearts
    is universal.




    Submitted on 2004-10-07 18:28:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good job, but maybe you should rename the title to Ode To American Sign Language, because I was thinking about age/sex/location on Instant Messanger...maybe I'm just stupid, haha.
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by Mariah | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice message and that's all my comment is going to entail, I love how you constantly drove the point home, not only is communication the key of life, but it can be done in so many ways, nicely expressed...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      The big clump disappearing would really improve the form of your writing. Sign language is hard and there is too a meaningful way to communicate besides talk from the mouth.
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by AFireInside01 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very powerful. I have an aunt who knows sign language and I know a very little myself, although it is one of my goals before I die to learn sign language. . . this is a very neat poem and I thought your structure was very good. . . up til the last stanza. If I were you, I would break it up to look something more along these lines. . .

    We are
    different
    yet we understand
    the language of hearts

    no matter where we live
    or how we communicate
    it's universal
    when viewed from the heart

    This is pretty rough but it's just my idea. I didn't really like the big clump at the end. Anyhoo, I think this poem could also be approved by eliminating the first person. . . it would be a challenge but well worth the effort. Great write!
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]


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