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why dont you listen?

Author: Day DreaMeR
ASL Info:    19/F/somewhere
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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i dedicate this to my friend and neighbor who likes this girl but shes been lying to him a lot and its pissin me off a lot and they got into a big fight today so....yea....just letting out my thoughts this isnt anything special..

why dont you listen?

Why do you sit here and take this?
Believe all the lies
That you have fell for
But ended up being told that they're aren't true

Why do you sit here and cry
Because it seems so hard
When its really not
Stop thinking this!

Why do you sit here and not listen
To the people who look out for you
don't listen to the good points
that would help you

Submitted on 2004-10-07 20:03:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was a very very good write. I can totally relate, people who sit and take all this [censored] from other people just pisses me off. This would be something I daily express to my mother. Wonderful write, keep up the great work.

-Miss M.
| Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
  very true words
if more people would listen to what is said to them they would learn
this can even be atributed to the negative comments of people

i liked your wording of this poem
you just said it all simply but write to the point

please take care of yourself

and yes family is very important to me

you are a bright smart child and you know where you got that from your parents

Take Care
| Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  you wrote here very strong words... i love them .. even though i dont like th eend .. but .. well it just sounded like a friend of mine .. well keep on writing and take care!
| Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
  i feel you on this one. my sister has this friend that she will not listen to any one about no matter what her friend does she still stays right beside her when she is stabbing my sister in the back. good write.
| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by devonsmom03 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this its small and gets the point across n u can def tell ur pissed.. keep up the good work.. i hope your neighbor comes to his senses soon
| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  i think that this is a perdy good, somewhat, poem/thoughts. i think it was short but sometimes the right person can explain a lot of feelings and deep emotions or thoughts in a short piece. Personally i dont think that you are that right person. althought it does relate to everyones everyday life. I too have been in that position where i see what my girl friend doest. i try and try to warn her but i dont think they get it. i like it. nice job.
| Posted on 2005-01-20 00:00:00 | by PookiezBookie | [ Reply to This ]
  its so much easier to just take a step back from your true self, and play games with other people, its gives for something to do and it makes it so you never have to really reveal yourself but still be liked, or wanted. im glad you can look through all of that, but dont let yourself get dragged down too.
| Posted on 2004-10-13 00:00:00 | by Josh | [ Reply to This ]
  I can't really comment that much on random thoughts because there are random and have no structure or flow in mind that can be improved on. However, I will say that writing is one of the best ways to get feelings out and it always works for long as you have stuff to write about that is...
| Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  People just have selective hearing and they only want to hear what comes out of their mouths not other peoples.I think that is disrespectful and they need to learn better manners
| Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by gothicsweetness | [ Reply to This ]
  People don't listen to what other people tell them because some people actually think that you're lying and then they have a reason to call it a lie. People need to sit and listen and then take what they know and try to fix it right
| Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by gothicsweetness | [ Reply to This ]
  ooo... very true
thing is... no one wants to listen... no one wants to be wrong... especially when it comes to love...
im not quite sure the first stanza is worded properly.. perhaps it could go something like...

Why do you sit here and take this?
Believe all the lies
That you fall for
But end up being told they aren't true

i think that works slightly better but it is fully up to you what you do with it.
anyways try not to get too frustrated with him not listening to you though im sure one day he will sure wish he did...
| Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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