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my heart and soul

Author: Medieval Aztec
ASL Info:    20/M/IL
Elite Ratio:    4.85 - 44 /40 /8
Words: 34
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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my heart and soul

My heart and soul are like simple ballads of music
Each note representing all my emotions
playing beautiful music for all the world to dance
and sometimes tragic for all the world to mourn

Submitted on 2004-10-08 06:06:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ahh, a true lover of music. It reminds me of a song from the old band cathch 22. he said this little thing like I live for music and music is my wife. It was an awsome song. I love a good slow song but I like the bad songs best.
keep it up. awsome word usage.
| Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by Lachesis | [ Reply to This ]
  awww...short and sweet. you caught the 2 most important feelings ...happiness and loss...i think. i think this is great the way it is. very deep if you think about it and...i liked it alot. maybe ill come to you for advice sometime.
| Posted on 2005-01-18 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, what a beginning! Tis my fav,"My heart and soul are like simple ballads of music"
I could take your three words "simple,ballads
and music" and write a volume on each .
This is to show you how power a line of poetry can be.
How do you like my revision of "Death" which is now,"The Last Kiss"?
I enjoyed your comment to me as of last. Thanks.
| Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
  Short but good write. It seems almost like your biography... putting in a nutshell what your life is all about. The good and the bad. The only thing I would possibly try to change is the repetition of 'all the world' although I understand the point you are trying to make... Great job!
| Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
  Few words but emotional and deep, I wished it was longer so that I can fairly judge, but I liked what was written and the message in it, Good job, keep it up.
| Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice and succinct: i like what u say: Your words express confidence: one little thng is u might like to capitalise your first letters of each line, it just looks better
| Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by littlecoombs | [ Reply to This ]
  This was such an interesting thought. Life's emotions and the things we go through playing through as different notes and crescendos and decrescendos of life that dance around us spiraling. I like definitly took life to a thought that I would never of thought of. And, being a lover of music I was able to relate to tragic some songs are just as our memories...yet how lovely other songs are...just as our other memories. Beautiful.
| Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]

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