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    dots Submission Name: Sunset Suicidedots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Dark
    Total Views: 656
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 551



    Description:
       Yeah Im ridiculous and I right these dark things for no apparent reason... No Im not thinking about killing myself, No Im not depressed, yes I have a dark mind that produces this stuff from time to time, And no Aaron you dont have to worry about me


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    dotsSunset Suicidedots
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    I wont wait on the other side


    Drew the line


    That only I crossed









    Im down


    Face first into red sand


    And your still looking for someone to put lotion on your back


    How Iíll miss the sunsetting over the ocean.




    Submitted on 2004-10-08 09:20:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      um so ok
    this is pretty odd
    i like tha tyou spaced it out weird (i know thats an awful comment deal with it)
    i also LOVE the suntan lotion on your back part
    but im having some issues fitting the first part with the second
    its very powerful though
    oh that and your weird
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by scorpio sphinx | [ Reply to This ]
      well it's not goth dark at least;) plus the second part has a sense of humor and i love dark humor, again you hit close to home with me, I don't understand girls at all.
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm gonna sing the Doom Song now. Doom doom doom doom doom doom, doom doom, doom-doom-doom, doom-doom-doom, doom doom doom doom doom doom doom THE END.
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... this is so... i dont know... i cant find a word to explain it. im much liking the down, face down, your waiting for suntan lotion... some ppl are so self absorbed... i dont understand how your words can be so very very few and yet have such a powerful effect on me... this is amazing!
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't what this is supposed to be, it didn't feel like a poem to me, and as a random thought it felt too "random", I don't get the meaning nor the outline!!
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Beast | [ Reply to This ]
      that is one strange poem.i have no further comments to make as i can't understand what you are writing about.the title is very misleading although it certainly does have potential.
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]


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