oh, [censored], son, this is great! i love love love the ending...that song, man, makes me want to like, go to some crazy strip clubs in Amsterdam and get completely wasted, dance with all the hot scandinavian chicks...whoa. gotta compose myself, goin to class this mornin...but anyhow, i love the very first line as well...about the tide comin, but you keep your feet in the sand...very Morrison-esque. the middle part needs a little more substance, i think...if you want i can work on it...????? id love to, need some new fun project...anytime dear. well i gotta split but i'll talk to you soon, very fun write! ~april
cool. i like the short pieces.. my attention span isn't what it used to be (i blame video games.. but that's just passing the buck) good job man, the ocean analogy worked really well. and [censored]ered me with that doors quote :)
dude...i love this...simplistic stuff seems to draw my attention...and the simple moment is more enjoyable than the metaphoric mysteries sometimes...i love the whole thing...and the simple statement of wanting to find that special someone...and your description of this write made me laugh though point understood...sometimes running outside our circle is what we need to find someone...outside of the comfort zone...but its worth it when you find that special someone...right?...i guess so...lol...i'm just as yearning as you...nice write...purps
you're on my wavelength(haha wordplay..waves..ocean..yeah). plus you went with two songs i like...I hate sting now but message in a bottle is good and the doors of course, though I think Jim had better luck with the ladies than i do...
first up... i love the quoting the door's part... thats awesome! i very much agree with your comment in the summary about needing to find ppl outside your sphere yet i wonder how one does that in all reality... i like how your the bottle... thats very groovy! good luck with everything!
i think this is fine the way it is sweet and it defintly shows you well with the quote at the end whats that about music being your life? i think that you should possibly if you want to ever take it further put some sort of emphasis on how you need a girl who isnt like the regular girls you know right <3
awwww... alright...you married?... hehehe okay okay...i'm a nut...wanna crack me?... ok ok...i know silly willy that can't think straight. it's you...you take the breath from my chest and the thought from my mind and wipe them out, leaving me completely out of control...filling me with your beauty...ahhhh you write love and longing so well.. yep...keep em coming your fans need MORE lol...ok i'm really sorry...i'm so BORED
I get the first six lines, and they describe what you said in your description very well but what I found was that those were about the message being sent and found, but the last stanza was about you again, when you'd had just talked about 'her.'
I can appreciate that this is just random thoughts but it sounded quite organised to me...
I like this! I often wonder if bottles ever make it to the other side of the ocean... I've tried but never gotten an answer.. I love the little things you put in here! And yeah, that song is so awesome that it made my day! Thanks!!