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    dots Submission Name: Got A Clue?dots
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    Author: dmm
    ASL Info:    50/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 741/888/102
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 951
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    Description:
       This is just a little ditty born out of the problems of day to day living.


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    dotsGot A Clue?dots
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    It's funny how you think
    that it's so easy,
    That there really is a reason
    and a rhyme.
    That you can put it all together
    not a problem,
    Then the cracks in the wall start
    to appear.
    And you say "It's just a momentary
    setback",
    As you grope around for duct tape
    and some glue.
    But it's become quite obvious
    not one of us has even got a clue.







    Submitted on 2004-10-08 12:25:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice! I like it... short and sweet... but not spoon fed or anything like that.. hehe... I can't stand people like that o.o they annoy me because they worry too much ^.^ hehe..
    good job on a great write
    -Alli
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
      PErsonally I would use gaff tape I prefer it to duct tape. Its funny how many people walk around speaking as if they have all the answers. I think to say you don't have a clue means your probably wiser then you would give yourself credit. This was definatley an enjoyable read...IT also makes me think of "fool on the hill" by the beatles. P.S. people dont give duct tape and glue enough credit!-John
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good poem. It is just another way to prove that the less people know the smarter they are. I like the duct tape and glue, not exactly the best to fix a wall with. But the more you know, the harder it gets. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      Funny little poem, but I think you may have a serious problem if you ar trying to fix a wall with glue or duct tape. I think your poem equates well with something I think Socrates said, "The wisest of men knows he knows nothing"(or something like that). Alot of people in everyday life seem to have an answer for everything, however like duct tape and glue, their solutions are not always the right ones. Anyway thats what I got out of your poem, and I really can't find anything wrong with it, to me its is quite a good write.
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Matthew Grey | [ Reply to This ]


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