Description: i have no clue. first thing i sat down and just wrote...finished...in a long time. its random thought, man, sad i guess...lots of that in my cave right now. sadness, i mean...
Living with Bears -------------------------------------------
i was living with the bears
we had no warm rolling tears
they are but claws in a thick hide side
why'd they bury me in my grunt
feel like below but i'm really up front
can't you see we're already all
We are going to be...
i am one of the smallest bears
curling in new peachy fur and arguing
why'd you have to leave me there
in a rusted sycamore hole where if
i could i'd of forgotten my soul
trudge___drag my fur cuz it feels like mud
got no place no rock just boiling blood
and you only happened in the woods
Bow and arrow fisted,
grimness never left you but twisted
random thoughts indeed, and you are still welcome here, why would you not be welcome. and another insight into your weird style. you always confuse me, or perhaps thats just because i'm still sleepy. anyways i understood three fouths of the poem, but was kinda left hanging in the air at the end, couldn't really understand it.
and yeh cheer up, nobody should be sad, it should be outlawed! yeh great confusing write! and i'm getting more confused cuz i'm listening to thats the way by led zep, and i never could really understand their lyrics, but hey jimmy page's a legend!
don't think i've read anything like this, it's weird and different and cool...it made me think of like umm what's that damn word? where you make animals like people and then people are like animals...damn, i lost my thought. I like it, it's cool! i'll leave it at that and try to find my head;)
the line "i'm one of the smallest bears" made me smile and feel sad at the same time..i've always liked that contradictory feeling.
Quite random thought indeed. But I think it works like I think all language ultimately should - conveying more emotion and actual meaning. And it is indeed sad. Is everything okay? I kinda expected a 'girl with her teddy' story, but this is much sadder. If ya need ta talk... shard
I really like this, although I think you could flesh it out a bit if you want. I'm assuming 'i'd of forgotten my soul' is deliberately bad grammar (if it's not deliberate, it's: 'I'd have forgotten my soul') - I'm not sure about that myself, but whatever floats your boat I guess. I love the feel of this bear cub, especially 'curling in new peachy fur and arguing' - there's a surreal but very fitting feel to that, and 'leaving me in my grunt'… this poem's got playfulness, even though it's sad, and a kind of primal energy - I think that's a quality in a lot of your work, and a very good one. Love it April. Becky
Well because of our convo the other day I think I have an idea about this one, however I definatley need to let this one ferment in my head before I can make an honest statement on it. Of course you know I love how you right...And you know if there is anything you need or wanna talk bout I am hear for ya!-John
Weird. . . I don't understand it at all. But I can help you make it good. . . first of all, though, I'm going to need to know what's going on in your mind, or if anything. . . but once I know that, I'd love to do a rewrite. . . to help the meaning come out - not completely clear, but clear enough that it is decipherable. Au revoir! -Secret
ooh... i kinda like it but it seems a bit abstract... random though was right... but with a little more tweaking it'd be great... Now past the poem... who's that in your picture? I think I might know who it is but don't wanna look like an idiot ~_~ ya know... might be wrong ^.^ -Alli
Submission Name: Living with Bears
