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    dots Submission Name: Did I give in?dots

    Author: winged_writer_robyn
    ASL Info:    16/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116/162/44
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       another ode to Doug... sigh... i know i'm obsessed. if you get tired of hearing about him let me know...

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    dotsDid I give in?dots

    I thought I swore off
    How is it that you managed
    to sneak in,
    like the wind,
    unnoticed and undetected
    and change everything around
    in the blink of an eye?
    I don't get it...
    I know I went into battle
    shields up
    armor on...
    how did you manage
    to capture my army,
    defeat my defenses
    without a single hit?
    ...I just don't get it.
    I fought and fought.
    I swore off any ties to love
    and yet here you are
    here WE are...
    I guess when something
    is meant to be
    I shouldn't question it...

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      Sweet poem. And it is funny how no matter what you say and do. love always seems to find it's way threw what ever you put up to stop it. Great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought you knew this already. Men come with an arsenal of stuff. Heavy tanks, machine guns, laser beams etc. A little armor won't cut it. lol. Just joking. As you can tell, I enjoyed reading your poem. Very entertaining.
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Cayman | [ Reply to This ]
      i know this one all too well... its crazy how you are so busy trying to keep the world out and then someone manages to sneak in and invade your whole world and its not quite the crisis situation you thought it would be... well its not yet anyways... good luck with everything and keep writing... even about Doug... you gotta write whats real to you and screw what anyone else thinks... if they get sick of it they can just not read it... do you let Doug read your stuff...?
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      You put nice emotions into your work. I think I just read sometihingelse you posted and if you write about him so much, then maybe there could still be a little 'fire' left between you maybe. You never know., Hodd luck to ya, whatever path that may lead you on.
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Chicool2 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I wish this was me, Im still foghting to get my love back. You two were ment to be, so were him and I, but we both [censored]ed up...check out my poems and you'll know what I mean! LOVED your write though, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by Brooke | [ Reply to This ]

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