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    dots Submission Name: Mother Naturedots
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    Author: Aken Sol
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 197/204/67
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Nature can be beautiful one minute, and ugly the next. Like human personalities....
    Aken Sol


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    dotsMother Naturedots
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    You bless us with
    Fields of flowers, azure skies with
    Fluffy clouds and warm sunlight
    When you’re happy
    With sheltering trees for shade
    And soft grass beds
    Nurturing us with luscious fruits

    Then you kill us
    With storms of
    Sand, water, thunder, ice
    Feeding us poison apples
    Disguised as food
    Tornados and hurricanes
    Floods and disease
    You bring us death
    When angry

    So we build walls
    To protect ourselves
    With our steel
    And skyscrapers
    We try to forget
    With our materials
    And we destroy
    Us both





    Submitted on 2004-10-08 18:58:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, i read this particular piece twice before I choose to comment. Overall you used good form and by doing this you kept your subject matter seperate and definitive
    | Posted on 2004-10-08 00:00:00 | by The Minister | [ Reply to This ]


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