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    dots Submission Name: My Walldots
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    Author: Aken Sol
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    Words: 86
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       I know people have written about thier walls against the outside world before but, well... hopefully mine's different enough and maybe you'll see that too.
    Aken Sol


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    dotsMy Walldots
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    I built a wall around me
    To surround me like a womb
    So I can be free
    In my Prison

    Canít blame me though
    Because itís not just my doing
    Just to let you know
    Itís your fault too

    Itís your stare
    Of hate and fear
    That lets me be aware
    That Iím unwanted

    Thrown upon me are
    Needed materials you gave me
    That can only go so far
    And I use them to build

    My wall
    Unbreakable
    Tall
    Cold




    Submitted on 2004-10-08 19:00:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      la la laaaa
    Wow.
    I love how you said "be free in my prision" It definitly shows that you feel a sense of security behind these walls. They protect, but at the same time, isolate you unfairly. It seems as though you put those walls up there, it wasnt JUST you who made them. It was a result of actions around you.
    k so my analysis of the poem was an obvious one.
    but I liked it.
    Good work
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      I haven't read much about walls being build around people but nevertheless, this write was good. There was a nice contradiction in the first stanza about being free in a prison, and that was an intersting concept to say the least. Also, I like how you described being rejected like having a wall being built around you. Is that what all the other poems about walls are about? I don't know...
    | Posted on 2004-10-09 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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