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    dots Submission Name: I Thought of Youdots

    Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
    ASL Info:    18/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 122/151/29
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 840
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Sometimes I feel the complete opposite of this, but right now I'm in a bad mood and am lashing out at everyone. So take whatever you want from this...

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    dotsI Thought of Youdots

    I can't do this anymore.
    I'm closing this door to my heart
    Because I'm sick of you.
    Go figure this world out for yourself.
    Why am I so lonely?
    Because of people like you,
    Coming to me only when it's convenient.
    It wasn't easy for me to be vulnerable,
    To have complete trust in a friend.
    And you've abused that power you have over me,
    You've cut deeper than any blade could
    Because you've discovered my little secret:
    You can run away for as long as you want
    And come back knowing that I'll be here,
    Waiting to hear about your latest adventure.
    I hate you.
    Just look at what you've done.
    I'm here, standing, alone,
    And still I miss you.

    Submitted on 2004-10-09 17:15:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's how I feel about my Ex_boyfriend. I hate him so much, but i still miss him. I love that poem. Because it just speaks to the heart.

    | Posted on 2004-10-09 00:00:00 | by Monkey | [ Reply to This ]
      once again I praise your work kalidoscopeeyes. this is brilliant.
    the only thing I would say pertaining to making it better is that, in my opinion, you should put a couple spaces here and there.
    for instance, after "go figure this world out for yourself." I think you should skip down a space and start the next paragraph with "Why am I so lonely?" because when you say 'why am I so lonely' you are starting a new idea.
    nonetheless, this is still a good piece and I love it.
    | Posted on 2004-10-18 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]

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