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    dots Submission Name: House of Richesdots
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    Author: Semper Fidelis
    ASL Info:    22/Male/ouahu, Hawaii
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 135/185/60
    Words: 611
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 921
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    Description:
        I had to write this poem for an english course I am taking in school at the present moment. I decided to piss to piss off the teacher by writting a long poem almost epic like in style. But the reaction I got was not what I expected, so check it out


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    dotsHouse of Richesdots
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    The Outside:

    We came upon the house-
    A monument fit for Soloman.
    Masonry was perfect and
    beautifully decorated-
    Reminicant of an Arthurian
    Mansion-
    Only lacking the moor.

    I was an ant-
    in the shadow of
    this fortress-
    An insignificant blemish
    on the face of this house-

    Great oaken doors-
    Knocks were in the likeness of
    Bacchas rang true thoughout
    this mansion-
    And with weight, force and much
    dispute, the doors opened.

    A brick wall compliments
    the profile of the house-
    like a bejeweled corsette-
    especially in the afternoon-
    An architects wet dream.

    I enter.

    First Floor

    Mosiac on the ceiling
    Hand painted tile on the walls
    custom built stars, original paintings in
    every room.

    Money can be smelled
    on both stories of the house-
    Aristocratic mannerisms
    seep from a lower class
    outcast...me.

    So out of place-
    In rags, walking
    through this compound of
    riches-
    Jealous as to what I am lacking
    Angry at the waste of funds

    What would it be like
    to be so wealthy?
    To look at a hundred
    dollars as mere paper?
    Poor am I indeed.

    A wine cellar-
    as deep within as a normal house,
    vrimming with fine wine,
    the likes of which a
    peon like me could never
    dream to afford-
    Red brick housing walls-
    in a climate controlled
    garage-
    A race car red
    Model T convertable
    with a cobra engine
    housed within-
    all for one man!

    Second Floor
    Up the spiral staircase-
    of oak and cypress;
    A ballroom made bedroom
    persian rug and chandelier-
    A red wood door
    with ivory handles-
    as big as a barn, yet far more attractive-
    Hand carved nature designs
    of flowers, trees and vines
    climb and grow through out the grain of these doors
    forever etched in time.

    Antique porcelin tub-
    Gold leaf water spout.
    Midas came here once
    His mark is scattered throughout the house.

    Onto the balcony-
    Wrought iron railings
    and antique theatre chairs,
    look over a city of peasant folk and streets-
    In the neighborhood of
    the rich, this house ,only,
    will catch your eye.

    Into the house again-
    and in the other bedroom-
    Filled with dark blues and
    soft down beds-
    Though the hallway-
    Pictures cover the wall
    of family, of friends-
    portraits of them all.
    An elevator we take down
    simultaneously with my spirits-
    Knowing only strife and
    debt into this house of
    riches-

    The elevator stops-
    back on the first floor-
    Out through the door
    into the Grotto-
    My spirits sink more.

    The Grotto

    Through an aromatic garden
    on a cobble stone path-
    Marigolds and roses
    hide the secret place-
    Statuary deep within the flowers.
    Fountains act as watering
    tools for the plants-

    Also they feed the
    pool, of clear blue
    and white-
    Warm and bubbleing
    for use during the
    night.

    Realizing how poor I am-
    I walk through the garden gate-
    How twisted and fleeting
    is the beast we call fate.
    Out onto the street-
    from which I came-
    I leave with invitations-
    to come and regret again...




    Submitted on 2004-10-09 21:42:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hello marine,

    well you're right, this was an excellent poem of epic proportions. great job on this. are you a reservist? in Louisiana? i'm stationed in japan at iwakuni. this piece was cool as hell, you did a hell of a job in the imagry department. thanks man
    | Posted on 2004-10-09 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      holy crap! your imagry is AMAZING! you created your own little world. AWESOME. that's just... wow...i really can't describe it. there is nothing i would change. i can see the whole thing so perfectly it's creepy. DUDE THIS KIX AZZ! wow, i'm astonished by how you went from one room to another and...wow. this is GREAT!
    | Posted on 2004-10-09 00:00:00 | by winged_writer_robyn | [ Reply to This ]


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