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    dots Submission Name: Haunteddots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This doesnt even come close to reality, it isnt the best I could do....but under the circumstances...right now it is the best I can do.


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    I am haunted by your sight,
    the day you had left,
    has left me crying at night.

    I didnt want that to happen,
    when you stepped in front of me;
    the way the bullet entered your skull,
    has left me haunted in the dark.

    my pain is so deep,
    my love is so gone,
    my nights are so long.

    it started out as a walk in the woods,
    and ended up a walk in a grave.

    I am haunted with this picture,
    every day and night I live,
    and here you are again,
    to haunt me in my sleep.




    Submitted on 2004-10-10 00:21:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my pain is so deep,
    my love is so gone,
    my nights are so long.

    it started out as a walk in the woods,
    and ended up a walk in a grave.

    oh...wow...this was...it gave me chills. It was really good...I loved it...cant really put into words what it made me feel..regret mostly, I believe...i think that if that happened to me, Id kill myself...but thats just me...looking for a reason to die anyways...ah well...see ya round...

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    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      another one of your more powerful works.. this is filled with the emotions of a pain that never seems to leave.. a terror that never seems to cease.. and a numbness that keeps feelings far away.. yeah i know what this is about.. and im sorry.. sorry..
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      that was spoken from the heart it is very powerful your expression is so real this piece jumps of the page and into my heart never to be forgotten
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by dark silence | [ Reply to This ]
      That sent chills throughout my spine. What you must have lived through to inspire this piece... I felt pain when I read that. It's a good piece, but I'm not as concerned about it as it makes me concerned about you. I hope you are eventually allright with whatever just happened to you.
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]


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